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    WoP uncontested verse..."A Day in the Life of..."

    A Day in the Life of…

    I awake to loud ass music…country western sung by Garth…
    With volume so abusive, the start of my day starts with barf.
    Choke back further bile, then rush out my quarters; can’t be late.
    For the line I’ll wait in, single file…just to get a breakfast plate.
    I’m sedate as I munch and crunch…it’s always rotten eggs raw…
    But the pieces of chick still in it prevent me from using a straw.
    I withdraw from the buffet, smoke a joint and prepare for pain…
    So my mind’ll be numb when my body succumbs to all it must sustain.

    Siren 1 signals my heading…to the first room on my route…
    Where inside, I’m held down and tied…by hairy men who shout.
    In my ear, calling me bitch…while they tear my ass to bits…
    And I lose hope for oxygen cuz my throats filled with lots of them dicks.
    Hours…this seems to last until every hard dick sags and I’m sloppy…
    Cuz I drained all their bags and now look like the poster boy for bukkake.
    They untie me and let me go…letting me know they’ll see me tomorrow…
    So I head back home and hit the shower…then it’s back to the route I follow.

    Another joint and 4 swigs of whiskey later, Siren 2 beckons me…
    So I exit my room feeling doomed because I’ll face more reckoning.
    Enter door 2 and get showered with bugs…spiders, beetles, and ants…
    Anything and everything with six legs or more, forcing my panicked dance.
    To try and shake em off; but their numbers always prevail…
    Until I lay there and writhe as they chew their way inside…
    …………………………….my eyes, ears, ass, throat and navel.
    No turning the tables…just gag in pain and revulsion, body’s convulsions…
    Then somehow eternity ends, and I’m thrown out like a school expulsion.

    It’s past a compulsion, the way they’ve suctioned destruction to me…
    And it’s my deduction they’ll never be a reduction in this painful production, see!
    I’ll sum up the rest of my day…won’t hit you with every detailed whim…
    But after the bugs it’s a lunch of…aborted babies who scream when you eat them.
    When lunch ends, I undergo amputations…everything on the anatomy chart…
    And there’s no anesthesia or milk of magnesia to ease the agony of being cut apart.
    Limbs get sewn back on…then it’s a round of being drowned in liquids…
    Everything from piss to puss…gasoline, ammonia, and septics.
    For dinner, I literally eat my heart out…get made to dine on myself…
    And in case I slow down there’s evil circus clowns…
    ………………………………………….with knives and forks eager to help.
    Every vice is available here…so my days always end with dope…
    But try as I might, no matter how high…
    ………………...I can’t forget the next day’s already lost it’s hope.
    But still, I do my coke…some E…maybe a couple of mushroom caps…
    Then fuck a whore in the ass cuz it helps time pass…
    ………………………………………………then it’s down for my nightly nap.
    Where I dream the same dream every night, cuz it shows why I go through this…
    It replays me giving up on that lonely night…and giving in to slitting my wrists.

    A Day in the Life of...being in Hell.



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    That is. . .almost legendary. No, it might be.

    The imagery was the most profound aspect. I just came to your thread in here because I saw the title and it evoked enough curiosity. This was some fucked shit, typical of your sick ass, but it was a pretty good depiction for Hell. You know you get stoned and read something like this and it can make you fucking paranoid, haha. Honestly this is like a requiem to drug abusers. I'm going to go ponder my existence now.
    can I kick it?

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    creative rhymes.........

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    Sick. Imagery was so profound that it reminded me of Saw II and Hostel (even though that was a wack ass movie). Anyway, flow and imagery was definetly on point and so was the overall content and message. That sure is a day in the Life of Hell. I liked how the different stanzas set up the different stages of time beginning with him waking up and experiencing that unfortunate situation. You're always an enjoyable read Mr. Born. Good shit.
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    *blushes*

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    Damn! Nawh, Damn! This shit must have ben good because I kept reading thru hoping something good would happen to you or you would wake up or some shit. But the ending you gave it was the only logical way it could have ended. Mad Respect. I loved it so much I hated it. I was hatin' every thing that happend. The story and immagery were so good I didn't even notice if it flowed or was on time. Good job. I got a post on here 2. my first. hit me up and let me know what you think. and yo. Don't be getting raped anymore that shit made my skin crawl. Big Ups

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    Thanks, Boe...

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    damn man, this was really good. i read it twice. there was no twist, but there was no real ending, if you know waht im saying. imagery was crazy as fuck. i couild literall see everything perfectly. each stanza was set up completely different, it was great, good job born to kill. hit up my piece racism, posted under the name percept. thanks

    nevermind. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...23#post3791523
    it was closed........ new thread

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    Um...bump...aight, people!

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    damn man, this was really good. i read it twice. there was no twist, but there was no real ending, if you know waht im saying. imagery was crazy as fuck. i couild literall see everything perfectly. each stanza was set up completely different, it was great, good job born to kill.

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    Thanks, Gangsta!

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    Sick...In all meanings of the word...From sentence 1 till the end I just kept readin' and readin', and I was gettin' more and more apalled by what u were sayin'...Imagery = dope, where u keep gettin' those mad lines? They're just...MAGNIFICENT...No other way to describe it....Ur flow kept goin and goin, and those mad lines just were damn 'enjoyable' to read,ya know? ... Structure was tight.... Sum sick aspects were in ya verse : rape, torture, fuckin' six legged bugs, eatin abortion shit --> INSANE! haha, man Born To Kill, ya mind is a hideous thing, but I like it, lookin' forward to vomit on ya next drop, just kiddin', ya dope!
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    talk about fuckin structure.............damn!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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