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  1. December 19th, 2005, 03:51 AM #1
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    Thumbs up My Journey To Heaven

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...30#post3630930
    there's one link


    AS I SIT IN THE HOSPITAL, CONTEMPLATIN MY DEATH
    I RECOLLECT A MEMORY, AND IT GRIPS ME-RIPPIN MY CHEST
    MY EYES ROLL BACK AND I LEAVE MY SANE MAINFRAME
    AND I'M TRANSPOTED TO A PLACE THAT ISN'T THE SAME
    ................I'M TRAPPED IN MY OWN BRAIN................
    MY HAND CLEHCHES THE RAIL AT THE SIDE OF MY BED
    AND I GO INTO SPASMS-BANGIN MY HEAD
    MY SOUL SEEPED OUT OF ME-THE COLOR WAS RED
    I'LL I COULD DO WAS WATCH HELPLESSLY AS MY BODY CONVULSED
    AND I WATCHED IN HORROR- MY VISION WENT BLACK AND MY EYES CLOSED
    AND THAT WAS MY LAST LIVE THOUGHT BEFORE MY HEART FROZE
    .................................................. .............................................
    NEXT THING I KNOW-I'M FLOATIN IN THIN AIR
    I SEARCHED THE HORIZON--BLACK AND BARE
    JUST UNKNOWN DARKNESS EVERYWHERE
    IS THIS THE JOURNEY TO HEAVEN?--THEN I SEE A BRIGHT LIGHT
    I WALK TOWARDS IT-EXPENDING ALL OF MY MIGHT
    AS I GOT TO THE GATES I SAW A BRIGHT FIGURE AT THE ENTRANCE
    AS A CANDLE IN A DARK ROOM FOR INSTANCE
    SO I WALKED UP-AND THE MAN HANDED ME A PEN
    AND SAID--EXPRESS TO ME WHY U SHOULD GET IN........................
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  2. December 19th, 2005, 03:55 AM #2
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    HERE'S MY OTHER LINK
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...44#post3630944
    ................
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  3. December 19th, 2005, 04:13 AM #3
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    love the vocab.... good word play, ryme scheme was alright, could of done better wit that......

    oh well that was a sik drop......

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  4. December 19th, 2005, 04:15 AM #4
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    Thnx................homie......................... ......
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  5. December 19th, 2005, 04:29 AM #5
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    that was a cold piece of work i like the concept of the story u got wit it and the creativeness u got goin wit it the wordplay could use just a lil work doe but other than that the structure was great and was so everything else

    9.5/10

    how u vote for vital in the battle over maze.Maze kilt him wit the punches lol
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  6. December 19th, 2005, 04:31 AM #6
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    Idk-----well Thnx For Tha Feed........................i'm Out 4 Da Night----holla
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  7. December 19th, 2005, 10:13 AM #7
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    homie that was ill, everything seemed perfect...some rhyming was a bit off...but other then that, it was DOPE....i could actually picture everything in my mind....
    vocab - 9.5
    imagery - 10
    rhyming - 9
    like it? - 9.5
    overall - 9.5

    nice drop man, i was feelin it
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  8. December 19th, 2005, 10:24 AM #8
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    nice piece on the real.........................
    good vocab, u stayed on the topic, very imagry, nice use of words, flow was on tracc. and i felt the structure. keep at it fams.....8/10

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  9. December 19th, 2005, 11:54 AM #9
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    thnx 4 feed yall.....................................
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  10. December 19th, 2005, 10:07 PM #10
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  11. December 19th, 2005, 10:45 PM #11
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    who wanna battle
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  12. December 19th, 2005, 10:49 PM #12
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  13. December 20th, 2005, 11:43 AM #13
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    Upp 2................................................. .........
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  14. December 20th, 2005, 11:44 AM #14
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    very good flow, good imagery, good vocab, good evrythin lol
    9/10
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  15. December 20th, 2005, 12:05 PM #15
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    thanx fam.....................stay up..........................put kronik flow in ya sig
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