Racism & War

[MagicConcept]

your all alone walkin da streets,someone gets in your face,
all up in your grill shoutin,coz you from a different race,
people pop dere gats, coz your in the marked place,
people have been shot,stabbed,raped,murded cozza their looks,
i have been sad,happy,angry annoyed cozza da lives racists took,

believe me when i say,racism exists everywhere you~go~ today,
i am realli pissed of at dese racist fucks,ima use my flow~to~say,
HEY,what the fuck we doin' wrong,cant we all jus get~along,
must tu~pac come~back nd make another ghetto~song,
Bush and Blair think all this shit doesnt subject doesnt arise,
they denying racism is not a problem,another lie....
.........what a suprise.

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distractions problems and fake~visions,
leaders are denying its all happenin,
we as the people gotta make the~decisions,
all get this matter sorted resolved,
lets do this as the people,fuck Bush fuck Blair,
they aint even involved,

i see people dying daily cozza they~skiiin,
murderers forgiven,like they never did~siiiin,
this world is blacked out and fake,with a solid exteria,
war and people getting murdered,bacame the world criteria,
i've seen a mother beg for her daughter....to die near to her,
i've suffered as well as the nation and to mother nature, i cry a tear for her,
another young boy away from his family,trained to kill''one more soldier reporting sir''

weapons of mass distruction,u say they werent~there,
american an english troops pay, it aint~fair,
George Bush wants to be a rich man,
he is jus another hitler, a get rich quick~man
he aint a soldier,a leader a guider,infact he is a bitch~man
startin wars,causin havoc the words jus a big glitch~man

Racism and war exist believ it or have ur eyes covered,
last time i check another mans body discovered,
in both terrorism and battle were all the same,
all where once babies with a dream and a rattle(lol)
Skandalous spittin wats reel,whislt the finisher spits beef,
dont judge me dogg,u got no idea how i feel,the finisher
mr puti and thingy king....hmmm now wats ur deel..

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PEACE
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[Cop-e-right]

i thought this drop was good the only thing i really say wrong with was structure...again im new here so i could be wrong ...but other then that man it was tight

[SIX6]

uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

[The Vortex]

nice emotion and stuff coming thru in this...i feel the format could of been made sharper tho...and vocab could of been expanded a lil...multies were decent/good i wudnt say off the heezy butn good still..flow was kind of incocsistant...
some rhymes got too basic for my liking..like weither its a multie or not ..i dont like seeing same words rhyming too much..like u rhymed man with man...etc etc..
was a decent drop still had sum poetics...

kepp at it yo

[Deception.]

Nice drop..Flowed well.
Topic's played but you gave it a nice perspective. Deep in some parts.
Overall I'd say 8/10
Keep it up playa

[StreeTDicyple]

hey i was really feeling this shit...i love political and racial based hip-hop that shit is great and if u into it i reccomend u buy the cds of or download immortal technique....he is fuckin amazing if u wanna hit me up on aim i wud be more then glad to send u his songs...he is an underground political hip hop artist and he is amazing...good shit keep it comin

[EyeBite]

this was a good drop
had sum good vocab and good rhymes
flow was smooth and strucutre weas even
topic was cool...
goood drop overall..keep it up..peace

[MagicConcept]

thanks For The Feed Bacc...................

[gansgta disciple]

pretty sic shit i juss wasnt ffelin tha flow but i think it was sic man keep at it aiight 1

[MagicConcept]

good looks.............uppin^^^^^^

[warchild]

I thought this was a decent verse, the concept has been done a few times before but you put your own spin on it and you made some intelligent points.
Your vocab was decent but i think you should of worked a bit more on it so you could of expressed your feelings and thoughts in more graphic detail.
This would of drew the reader more in the piece and would of made the piece have a bigger emotional impact. Some of the lines were corny and have been said a lot of times before, But you made some good points ocassionaly in the verse but you lacked complexity when it came to imagery. I know not everybody likes to write rhymes that are too graphic but a piece like this needed that but it lacked it. Your flow was a bit weak a few more multies mixed in would of added another level of complexity to your verse.
Ive seen better pieces from you so maybe this was a rushed a piece it wasnt bad but it wasnt good. My advice is think of some original concepts and take your time when your writing, peace.
Return the feed on my Om:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=253814

[Paze]

I never read it alot but the lyrics make sense & you should record