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    Stuck in Love f/ lyrical miracle

    white= lyrical miracle
    black= killamami

    girl listen.... about you girl i been remeniscin boo
    wonderin how i contain existence being such a distance from u
    i'm wishin that u... can touch me, kiss me, luve me, i'm simply
    just sayin... that i'm not playin i want u to just be with me
    and when i was gone that was temporary boo... sorry 4 scarin u
    i hope believin that me leavin u is something i will neva eva do
    u make me wanna marry u... i just wanna carry you down the altar
    and the line above this one is a promise it's not an offer
    am i hurtin down inside? yes....................................
    .............. why? cuz i ain't been able to look in ur eyes yet
    have you realized yet?... that we're one of cupids works in progress


    yes i realize it, in fact the realizations just too real
    cant control my feelings so anything you ask i will fulfill
    yesterday i was livin life as if it was just a thing to do
    but now livin life is like a duty and top priority is you
    you're my heart so any hurt that you feel i feel too
    if you stop breathin, then the day you die is the day i'll die too
    pushed out of existince without you cause its not even possible
    for me to eat or even breathe knowin you dont love me, its not probable
    this is the only way that i can show you i love you since you're so far away
    but wait and pray for the day, when we can be together, face to face


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    lyrical its coming...chill............yall muthasukkas better give us some muthasukkin feed...plz....see lyrical thats all you had to say

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    ^ not really what ya got to say...i just feel ya that there is no feed...peeps way too lazy..just retrin the feed on my OM..ight

    this drop was iight....strcuutre was bad and flow was bad
    rhymes were prettyg ood from both of you./
    topic was iight ot thta different but waas cool
    ight drop overall keep elevaiting..peace

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    Enhance the lyrics and youll be fine. Use more complicated words but ones which people know what they mean. Anyone got a dictionary...?

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    best thing i liked about the 1st verse was-
    u make me wanna marry u... i just wanna carry you down the altar
    and the line above this one is a promise it's not an offer




    best thing i like about the 2nd verse was the flow and delivery...tho those couple long lines that go off the page cud ov been worked on to fit the format...even so nice emotional piece....

    but now livin life is like a duty and top priority is you
    you're my heart so any hurt that you feel i feel too
    nice

    has sum good poetic elements
    just try to improve the structure a lil..
    .................................................. ......................

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    thanx uppin!

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