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Thread: Story Track..."Little Johnny Raw"

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    Story Track..."Little Johnny Raw"

    Top Song, "Little Johnny Raw" Think this might be more of y'alls style preference.

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    Aight aight. i was feeling this. You had perfect presence good quality i don' t have nothing bad too say.
    I guess I wasn't really feeling the hook. The verses were dope tho. Keep em coming

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    aiight...intro was coo. beat is kind of wierd....sounds like a fat kid is farting in the background for like 5 minutes...but its not bad...its kinda growin on me. flow is on point for the most part but there are a few parts were it is a lil off. Mic presence and emotion are good. hook is coo... im really feelin the lyrics, a pretty story track you got here. vocab could be better but the story itself was tight. it kind of reminded me of "dance with the devil" by immortal technique. the only thing i would suggest is get a different beat....i didnt know what to think of it at first but then at the end the noise in the background got annoying. good shit tho, hit me up if you wanna do a collab sometime

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    feelin the intro/ hook.. you dun this nice still.. i am really feelin this yo, mad story vibe, and u dun it well... for serious ting... flow is on point like pin cussions.. i dno what to say really other then ill.. the life and times of jonny.. lol.. medicine couldn't fix.. lol.. i dno yo... hit me up if u wanna collab some time.. other then that.. peace..

    hey is this u on the 3rd verse as well .. sounds like a next man.. meh.. get at me.. 1
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    yea like everyone siad nice intro.. your voice nice.. nice quality.. the beat i dunno i dont like it at all really so i guess up on that... otherwise nice shit.. keep it up homie

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    yea i wasnt feeling the beat that much... but i got it for winning a local battle, soooo. i also won the "Rock & Roll" beat through the same battle! But i appreciate all y'alls opinions!

    and yea thats me on the third verse! i tryed to change my voice at the beginning to sound like "little johnny" if you listen closely i say "quote" and then "end quote" before and after "this shit is crazy..."
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    topic is kinda wack, but ya delievery and flow is on point
    beats aigh, not feelin da verse part, hook part of da beat is betta
    good story tellin tho, dont try to make up a random story, tell one that is close to bein true...about somethin you went through or something

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    man damn... this is way hotter than some of your other shit... the intro or hook whatever is nice, real nice... your delivery is nice, not too powerful but just right... flow is on point too... the story is cool too... nice work on this for real man... I can't find anything really wrong... you don't sound like the little fella in your picture... lol...

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    This nice emotions are well done....nice story telling no doubt...is like immortal tech kinda track telling indepthness of story and ussualy ends with something going bad..lol but yeah am feelin this we should get together and work on a track....


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    i started out feeling it, chorus is good for the track but at the end i felt like you wasnt putting it together as strong as the first parts of the track but overall this was a solid story telling track

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    LMFAO at the pic.

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