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    Wat If

    Wat if alliyah didn't fly that nite, wat if eminem wasn't white,
    would he sell, wat if snoop dogg never met pharrel,
    would g thang been replaced with drop it like it's hot, Rappers all under 6 feet so how they get blocks,
    Wat if african americans were owners and crackers were slaves, Wat if tsunamis didn't have such strong waves,
    Wat if game aint ride 50's dick would he still be the west side story, Wat if rappers aint snitch just for glory,
    Wat if super size me was out in the 90s would big pun still be alive, The rap game like a reality show the way emcees try to survive,
    Wat if mlk aint die would he be the first black president, How 50 call him self the king of new york when he a connecticut resident,
    Wat if the south aint blow up would mike jones exist, WHO!!! COuldn't spit dope if you had a mouth full of ricky williams piss,
    Wat if 2pac wasn't at mike tyson's fight, Wat if he wasn't in las vegas that nite,
    Wat if immortal technique had a video woudld it go over bet's head, How come people aint standin up for they belifs most go unsaid,
    Wat if christopher reves was a trackstar, How come all emcees try they hardest to act hard,
    Would LL cool J went platinum if he wasn't so buff, because canibus showed the music industry he wasn't so tuff,
    Wat if lil kim wasn't going to jail would she get 5 mics, If it wasn't for biggie would she be this tight,
    If eazy e was alive would he call game a fake, ja rule like a dollar tree product he will eventually break,

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    Any reviews

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    DAmn..i was not expectin this from you....

    juss your ideas and how u word'd them trully blew me away, i thought you had some great lines...the only things i would say that was a downfall 2 this piece was ur structure through off the flow a bit, but the overall idea and topics u had in it were juss a remarkable effort..and a joy 2 read! some true things in here 2, real serious...but u also through some funny lines in there..so it was all good with some variety!

    some of my fav lines!

    Wat if super size me was out in the 90s would big pun still be alive, The rap game like a reality show the way emcees try to survive,

    ^^laughd a bit..

    Wat if the south aint blow up would mike jones exist, WHO!!! COuldn't spit dope if you had a mouth full of ricky williams piss,

    ^^kinda ripd on um both...laughd a bit


    there are more....


    id say this is a good drop...but you have some work you can do 2 elevate...such as structure,mabe up ur wordplay a bit/vocab etc. also i felt you kinda end'd this juss by breakin it off....thought it could use a better closer!! ya dig

    good verse though


    **o and thanx 4 the GREAT feedback in Written voices COLLAB!*

    its appreciated

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    wow,........this sounds like a remix to jadakiss's why...................firt fix your structure,......also fix ya rhyme scheme,.......fix ya flow,............basically jus elevate alot dude,.....u have ways to go
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    THx you both yea there will be a second verse to this real soon and maybe a 3rd who knows... Peace stay up

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