[Topical] O.V.Dose vs Tru$t

[Mr. Write]

20 lines
DUE: 1hr 30 min
House rules

Topic: Touched by an Angel

[Mr. Write]

This is my check. good luck to you sir.

[Tru$t]

check.

[Tru$t]

life is altering in every direction can't be grasp or clutched
deaths of mobs 'n dutch simply as toddler pullin the trigga by a touch
a mission in life is givin in rolls have the right decision by votin in polls
life isn't authnentic made like south pole its givin with in all souls
in heaven the angels r writing the work of good 'n bad of yor remedy
if angels were rappin then they will collect souls in-a pac beat melody
r u gettin me? even though we all get 1 chance they look upon us
every goodness we occur or sins that blurrs the prophets still run us
the finger of a angel must feel like a feather wit million souls extortions
more then computer chips in 2 proportions harder then chines obortions
the heavens 'n hells 'n unpredicted realms people dieing by L's
have the last breath wanted for after life liquid like wishin wells
its fucked up how we can't handle the fuckin of fuck urge
millions of new life occurs when the sperm and eggs emerge
don't know when they will came at us but known for death will happen
the touch is forever as eternal similir to ghetto where the guns be clappin
if your the 1 then wings will be flappin on your coffin in every angle
eyes open must meen your waiting to be touched by an angel

[Mr. Write]

Topic: Touched by an Angel

Been married for ten years at night i lay in bed and shed tears
The end is near......being alone is something even death fears
How did we get here at this desperate imitation of intimacy
Sure we sleep together...but only until youre finished with me
Ive been asleep most of my life with eyes wide open
I tried copin with the fact you slept with guys i know and...
You have no plans for romance i just want to hold hands
Listen to some slow jams but you'd rather go out and pole dance
I can barely hold back my rage .....so i stash it away
Would it be too much to ask for you to act your age?
You have no faith its like your heart is black and stained
I say "I Love You"...........and you just laugh at my face
My hearts been slashed and raped i cant take this masquerade
I have a resevoir of memories where i'll shove the past away
Today i went to see a lawyer so i could file for divorce
As i arrived home from court my wifes with guys on the floor
Ignoring her cries i rushed to the kitchen to grab some knives
Then i stopped and thought for a second decided to run outside
Now shes out of my life...fuck marriage wait till im older
As i look back im glad i listened to the angel on my shoulder

[Tru$t]

uppin #1..........................................

[Mr. Write]

good battle.......lets get some votes on this yall

[Tru$t]

uppin #2..........................................

[Tru$t]

uppin #3...........vote fuckers...................

[Tru$t]

uppin #4..........................................

[SyCo_187]

This Was A Good Battle I Drop An Honest Vote Once Im Done
Desipherin Everything...LOL

Hey Hit Up 1 Of My Battles With An Honest Vote Yo

[Alias Minded]

i wuz feelin OV a lil mo beter wordplay and creativity good battle but O gets this one wit beter creativity

[Tru$t]

Explain The Votes.................................

[Tru$t]

life is altering in every direction can't be grasp or clutched
deaths of mobs 'n dutch simply as toddler pullin the trigga by a touch
a mission in life is givin in rolls have the right decision by votin in polls
life isn't authnentic made like south pole its givin with in all souls
in heaven the angels r writing the work of good 'n bad of yor remedy
if angels were rappin then they will collect souls in-a pac beat melody
r u gettin me? even though we all get 1 chance they look upon us
every goodness we occur or sins that blurrs the prophets still run us
the finger of a angel must feel like a feather wit million souls extortions
more then computer chips in 2 proportions harder then chines obortions
the heavens 'n hells 'n unpredicted realms people dieing by L's
have the last breath wanted for after life liquid like wishin wells
its fucked up how we can't handle the fuckin of fuck urge
millions of new life occurs when the sperm and eggs emerge
don't know when they will came at us but known for death will happen
the touch is forever as eternal similir to ghetto where the guns be clappin
if your the 1 then wings will be flappin on your coffin in every angle
eyes open must meen your waiting to be touched by an angel

here i made it bigger so u noobs can read it

[Eye`]

i liked imagery and vocab on both drops, but only 1 had the emotion there.

v//OV for loads of emotion and perfect imagery. tru$t, work on emotion.

pz.