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    Silence is Pregnant

    The people are blind to the facts
    Which explains the current trend in fiction
    The people’s united eye is a cataract
    Ignoring a plethora of truth with conviction
    It’s written in a code; perfected in ignorance
    Copyright of those who spill blood of the innocent
    Published by the naked eye in distribution
    Printed in small text - sometimes invisible ink
    To shrink the reader’s squint in fear of losing
    Personal opinion to universal wisdom. . .
    Blink
    Tomorrow is concepted by yesterday’s reverence
    Breathe life into your words (silence is pregnant)
    Stitch your lips together in a web of deceit
    Make reason an insufflated powder your brain’ll receive
    But keep it all silent so eyes may perceive
    Nine months of tolerance of a violent disease
    A bit of intimidation and fear is all it needs
    Snort the born seed until each nostral bleeds
    Feed on the beliefs to regurgitate religion
    To voice what’s hidden beneath, there is no ambition
    Chop it fine into chiseled dusted segments
    Read between the lines
    The answer is cancerous when silence is pregnant
    can I kick it?

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    Nicely written man...The former half of your piece was a good buildup to the latter portion, with poignant lines like "Printed in small text- sometimes invisible ink, to shrink the reader's squint in fear..." that line stood out to me. The latter half only improved upon the powerful imagery and contrasts of the former and two lines in the title made sense. The word choice is superb and really highlights the level at which you write. Finally the closing line left me with an ominous yet satisfied feeling, a very apt ending, definitely. Overall i enjoyed the nuances of this piece, the contrast and layers, you've again showed why you are recognized among the most skilled on the site, nicely done Luke, 1luv.
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    Writer's Note:

    I wrote this about 4-5 months back, after a really bad hiatus from poetry. It was one of the times I left the site, and after I left I didn't really have the time to write a lot. Then my schedule loosened and I found myself needing to write something. I ended up writing this and didn't like it for a while. I decided to post it because after looking over some small works I'd done, I thought that now if ever was a good time for a political poem, which this was intended to be although it can be interpreted differently. Thanks.
    can I kick it?

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    Read this mu'fuckaz.
    can I kick it?

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    Very powerful piece; I liked this. I really liked it a lot.

    The cocaine imagery in the last third of the poem was sweet, and I liked the whole concept. Very appropriate to your message.

    Nicely written man.
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    again ill go with teh majority on this piece i thought it was a strongly written piece it had alot of backbone to it...ther ewas one thing i didnt like and it was the tomorrow-yesterday line to me it was something that was put in to catch the eye and keep the reader but i felt it was put in at the wrong time in the piece i think it would have been nicely put in the first portion of the poem
    but then again thats just what i think and that doesnt really matter much to you
    however it was a great piece with alotto offer
    thanks for posting and be sure to peep ya fellow poets

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    Spoken I thought that this was a real dope piece. I liked the imagery & vocab alot. You imagery was nice but it wasn't like damn there piece is like a movie. But the emotion with your words was nice and I was feeling that alot. I like the feel to this piece although I cant really describe it that well. But overall I enjoyed reading it.

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