20 lines.
Blind spits.
Due Tuesday, October 18th,, 2005.
Topic: Current Events.
20 lines.
Blind spits.
Due Tuesday, October 18th,, 2005.
Topic: Current Events.
Czech nigga. Say goodbye to your topical skills kid.
lol.... smeh
check
Roc-A-Fella !
Changing the topic to: War Cries. me and whiteout just agreed on this.
20-30 lines. same due date
yes sir
Roc-A-Fella !
yo white out i no this is freepostin but i gott ask u sumit andf i know u will know i duno whre else 2 post it widout gettin banned. sumtimes my battle records show and sutimes they dont?
neways if u aint got a postin limit on this i will vote on ur battle Fairly 2 YALL
i dunno ne of u 2 but i read sum of whyts verse well one "in the darkenss" i fink it was called an it wa hot as fire so opponent bettas have sum good shit. safer
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im droping tonight or tomorra night...
Roc-A-Fella !
War Cries
-The Son-
Sitting at the table when erupted silence of boom echoed in my ear
Saw a shadow with a gun coming near. I started to feel afraid and fear
With my heart-beating, I ran quickly near the exit. The back door
I panted and panted, not looking back, already in pain my legs are sore
Breathing so heavily, then everything happen so fast. Agony hit my back
Feeling so hopeless I dropped to my knees, trying to crawl, but i lack
Flipped my body, saw the person coming toward. I put my hands up
I couldn't hardly speak, but my hands cueing "Please beg mercy, fuck"
Then I started to choke..Couldnt breathe...heart beating so slowly
Gasping for air, but couldn't get none. Last word i heard was "Rest in peace"
-The Mother-
My Eyes Widen in horror as I saw my own son being shot by an unknown
Like my heart was being pulled out, I was shocked. I was physically thrown
Cropped to my knees, crouching, and trembling, shaking with salty tears
Quiver lips, feeling Scared. Shaking my head trying to wake from this nightmare
He's going to come after me next my mind went. Quickly I ran to the door
With Teeter hands, I turned the door-knob and peeked looking at the horror
Worried decreased, but the fear stayed in me. Knowing the coast was clear
I ran to the nearest phone, Picked it up with worry ness being increased. I was in fear
With my fingers acting like it got a seizure I dialed 9-11, feeling so heavily impatient.
But everything happen so quick, As I heard "police can i help you" as i fainted
-Himself-
Shot the 2 suspects, feeling so victorious. A smile crept across my face
Standing atop the dead bodies. I felt no regrets, didn’t even thinking to pray
Then my eyes started to go un-blur when All of a sudden i felt my heart.
It was so sore, i crashed onto my knees, my lungs started breathing so hard
Looked at the dead-bodies, they looked familiar, the one i loved in a pool of blood
Back door all open, walked to it then saw him. My son. Feeling so shocked, I stood
My fingers on my head, felt the handle of the gun. Then thinking, while choked on tears
That I wanted to forgive them. But How, then thought of heaven, might as well go there
Put the barrel of the gun aiming at my head, with quiver lips. I Pulled the trigger
Down I went, and hopefully heaven I'll go.Mind so attach in war, I killed my own people.
Last edited by Crooked-I; October 19th, 2005 at 05:53 PM
good ish.... hoping i can top this. . . . i started working already, been real busy on school work.. it will definately be dropped tomorrow. im out
Roc-A-Fella !
scripts of past~dreams with a twist of flash in a distance glance..
ripped with limbs twitched like a hindge and flashbacks of clips that blast..
Secluded in a Alien Nation, Facing these Unpredicted Situations...
Loved ones Dreading the Acceptance of that Unforgiving Certification...
Emotions Spilled out on a Pad in a Letter Home...
Attempts in Raising Spirits Of Peoples of Which Sorrow Souly Condones...
Cherish Memories As I Lay To Rest, always One Eye Lifted...
Folks at Home Settle in Hoping More time to Make Memories will be Gifted...
Prayers got out, time flys like watches in the sky while dramas airing it out...
Bullets Trapped in, Never to Be Released because Blood Shed isn't What im About...
The Enemy Awaits us On this final Deadly Indevor...
Failing is Not an Option, or Ungreatfulness Over Our Heads Forever...
Hate is Felt But Murder is a Completely Different Story...
Peace wanted but if Taken, Millions Think No Guts No Glory...
Brothers In Arms all Bloody as their Lives all Abate...
Expression of Sorrow but nothing Like the Families can Relate...
Horror Strikes the faces of Relatives when That Black Limo Pulls In...
Faces look so Good and Strong but Agony Eats their Bodies within...
Enemy Frowning, Screaming Sad Noises as Tears Heavily Flow From Their Eyes...
Filled with So much Anger Yet Even War Manages to Cry...
*Sorry hadda cut this short.. im batteling family issues and writing this.. so i have to cut it short.... still a good deep piece...*
Roc-A-Fella !
bumping this 1nce
Roc-A-Fella !
crooked
i liked the creativity with the three seperate point of views, and also ya visual was good, overall this was a very good topical battle for u,........i think the structure was good , but your vocab to me was jus a lil above average, if the vocab was a lil better this would have been a easy win for you...........overall good verse
Whiteout
ya structure was good also, but he had u with the creativity of the three point of vewis, ya visual was very good, and your vocab was above average, sorta like u took time on chosing mascalite words to help ya verse, this actually worked for me, between the great vocab and the visual this was a good verse from u also......onli thing i thing that will win u this battle is your visual, it's like i saw everything that was going on..........overall good peice
i vote for whiteout for better visual and vocab........everything else was pretty even
And If You Lie About BattlesDepression Starts Talking And His Voice Is Raspee
Im Raising Your Face..Niggas Will Never Get A 5'o Clock Shadow
-Joe Budden
Kuz He Aint Shut The Fuck Up In 3 And A Half Weeks
-Joe Budden
I-dis was a good peice, but for some reason, wasn't really feeling it,the vocab was good(don't no what ova guy ment), but to me the visual was kinda mehh.......no hate cuz it was a very good peice
white-Your flow was on point and so was the structure, a very good peice from you also, i realy couldn't find and thing wrong with this at all, the vocab was superb and the imagary was superb aswell,, like i said nothing really to point out cuz i felt's tho nuthing was wrong, great job.
V/white because i thouht he had dopeer visual
thanks guys... im surprised ya'll aint likin his ish,, well,, not like that.. but uppidy #3
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