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    Objecting Nature

    Objecting Nature

    Simplistic beautification, natures destroying the nation
    Katrina’s evacuation, mothers and sons in devastation
    Demanding a donation, help to reconstruct an apartment
    Where has nature’s heart been? Dig up children in the garbage
    Full of hardships, Countless bodies lost in Tsunamis
    I object nature, before an avalanche erupts in the Rockies
    Or a sand storm kills the Iraqis, just a few natural disasters
    Visits to pastors, covering gruesome wounds with tattered plaster
    Deaths introduced faster; children catch a glimpse of life
    Then get struck with natures disguise, and gutted with its knife
    This shits strife, god’s creation of earth is a house of slaughter
    Mother Nature danced with the devil, and evolved a daughter
    Elements such as water, an infant drowns with no help
    Sinks to the bottom like shells, gulping for air with a yelp
    And fire?...like the gates of hell, explode with a killing
    3rd degrees mark the body of teens and little children
    Winds got an evil grin, so its peaceful?….I say no
    Don’t disregard the terror embedded in the eyes of tornadoes
    I stand tall like a judge, for the nature’s freedom I budge
    And object with a furious grudge, it’s thick like sludge
    A temper I touch, scream out “mother natures a slut”
    So many lives are fucked, so its mothers’ neck I cut
    The knife full of blood, the shed of innocent victims
    Touched with a sense of nature, and a fucked up system
    A ballad with no rhythm, just screeches and horror
    All the tension builds farther, boils anger…it bothers
    All these disasters are done, the fight is over, we won
    She’s hanging over with blood, her lips blue and numb
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    .
    .
    A tall rope, she’s hung, the natures death is sober
    But one thing we didn’t realize….now life is over

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    multies=illness

    imagery was sick

    so was flow, topic, and wordplay

    i see why youre a bboys legend: dope shit yo

    10/10 easily

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    Originally Posted by Vamp.
    this is perhaps the gayest thread...ALIVE....

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    I'm liking this, great multi'z and good flow. Great balance of vocab, don't over use it too much, some simplistic minds will throw them off, if you know what i mean?..But overall nice imaginary and that was the best aspect following it up with good emotion, no joke. Everything was on Point...Great JOb.

    Please leave feed on my OM called "Save A Life"..ditto

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    ill get to those tomorow

    gotta get to bed

    keep the feed up

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    Nsfnsffsffs

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    Uppers

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    up !

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    final up

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    damn Nef....love the concept....and you pulled it off nice.....started off slow but built and ended it nice.....vocab/multies/imagery/metas.....all on point....a good combination of everything done well....nice

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    Uppin this piece

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    that was a dope verse.....some sic shit....good flow, u vocabulary was great, multies were good, nice creativity.....u never fell off topic, the verse kept me interested the whole time....this was one of the best OMs i read on here so far...haven't read that much, but...keep writin those sic lyrics
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    Alright Cave, I enjoyed reading this piece. I am sick of melancholy
    pieces though, even though I write shit loads myself lol. First off
    you rhyming scheme is very apparent to start with and it reminds
    me of Dev's. Its nice and basic, but you throw a few internals in
    there to mix it up which is always rereshing.
    For the piece itself, twas a nice concept and you came across as
    if you were debating and not explaining which was cool. I like
    reading arguements and statements much more than I do stories,
    unless its dope.
    The lines Ima quote now aren't next to each other in the actual
    piece but its all my favourite lines just put into a paragraph.

    I object nature, before an avalanche erupts in the Rockies
    Or a sand storm kills the Iraqis, just a few natural disasters
    Mother Nature danced with the devil, and evolved a daughter
    Don’t disregard the terror embedded in the eyes of tornadoes
    Your symbolism in the last 2 lines was dope as hell. Its something
    you should definately keep in your pieces. Keep writing to find
    comparisons etc because when you do, they work so well.
    As for the Iraquis line, I quoted that because the flow was dope..
    the wording was perfect and for me to say that, it is.

    Good piece, man. Keep writing in here.
    & Try and hit up my latest piece in my sig'.

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