The Flame (Feel Me)

[UnAuthorized]

Intro:
I Want Everybody To Feel Me on This...Everybody Lite up Your Reefer..Grab Your 151 and Take That Shitt Straight Cuz Everybody Need To Feel Me on This One.....



I Don't Know Wether To Be Affraid or Embrace The Change..
Confused in My Mind, Things Change, and Things Feel Strange...
an Even Exchange, My Life and All of My Things..
For A Chance To Walk Free Through The Valley of Kings...
See Thy Wings, See The World, Incredible Beings...
Stand Without Strings, We All Gott Incredible Dreams..
Sippin From Streams Gives Us Strength in Spiritual Means..
We All Walk The Same Line Like Programmed Machines..
The Earth Spins, The Night Slowly Fades To Light..
It Represents Our Life, EveryTime We Struggle and Fight..
It May Seem Cold and Dark, But It’s Gonna Be Alright..
The Sun Come Up Everyday, Bright Providing The Light..
Guiding us Right, Keeping Dreams Alive in our Sight..
We Gotta Spark The Flame of Life That We All Strive To Ignite..
Alive on The Mic, Survivin The Plight, Grippin my Pen..
Listen Again, A Silent Revolution Ascends..
Quiet Wars, Feel Remorse, For Lifes That Come To an End..
and Innocent Men, With 25 To Life in the Pen..
Lett’s Take it Back To The Creation of Man.. Put Together By Hand..
Made From Earths Dirt, Clay, and It’s Sand..
Givith a Name, Give us Destiny That We Claim..
Give us Power To Move Forward, Please Lord Givith The Flame....

*.*.*. FeedBack Please .*.*.*.*

[TheCrunkKing]

ight, i first read it, it was alright, lit up on da bag, it was good mane, good ryhmes, good flow, i really fely it mane

[UnAuthorized]

Thank You.... Any Ideas on Improvement??

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=228490

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=225499

[Ether Spitter]

not bad dunn...i liked the intro to ya whole piece..this mid came kinda weak to me....ya wordplay in the beginning was coo and inspiring...but the mid seemed a lil dull..the end of ya piece is whatsup...the Divinity himself...he is the one who will lead us on the right path to all of our dreams...

igido

[Elavated]

Ehh still need some elavation but it delivered a message nice piece overall keep droppin

[mcl]

this has got to be one of the best flowing pieces iv ever read the the rhymes were sweet as well

[UnAuthorized]

Thanks For The Feedback..I'ma Keep Tyrna Elevate My Skillz... Stay up Ya'll

[Yung-City]

Unauthorized lets battle ,you seam ight ..

[UnAuthorized]

Unauthorized lets battle ,you seam ight ..

Aight..i'm Down,I Dunno How To Do it...But Lemme Know When

[UnAuthorized]

ok?

[Harmon]

For A Chance To Walk Free Through The Valley of Kings...
See Thy Wings, See The World, Incredible Beings...
Stand Without Strings, We All Gott Incredible Dreams..
Sippin From Streams Gives Us Strength in Spiritual Means..
We All Walk The Same Line Like Programmed Machines..

-fuckin dope...thats shit was shakin my vision it was so hard-


Guiding us Right, Keeping Dreams Alive in our Sight..
We Gotta Spark The Flame of Life That We All Strive To Ignite..

-I said damn.....one more time....DAMN! Ill set of bars-

Alive on The Mic, Survivin The Plight, Grippin my Pen..
Listen Again, A Silent Revolution Ascends..
Quiet Wars, Feel Remorse, For Lifes That Come To an End..
and Innocent Men, With 25 To Life in the Pen..

-That shit is phenominal DAMN CUZ..


This shit was dope man..I'm really feelin this piece for some reason..Keepin postin dawg I'mm keep replying

[UnAuthorized]

thanks homie

[James,]

yeah loved the flow good shit keep it comin