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    "Never Approach the Unknown..."

    Sometimes I need a friend
    Sometimes I want a lover
    Sometimes I want an end
    Sometime I need forever

    Who knows, any ol’ which way the wind blows
    Many woes shall accrue on the head of a good beau
    Not foes dealing hence such insolent blows
    Rather though, the close friends, he thought to know
    Thoughts erode, for they mean little in translation
    For to know, lessens not the imminent sensation
    A generation obsessed with tittalition, abrasions
    To the soft mind of Creations intended, offended,
    Nah, not really, but sometimes, it’s hard for the blessed
    To bow before weak minds, in the meantime ahead,
    Before the weights fetter the lever and leave head,
    Severed from body like sliced bread, tethered to mice fed,
    By cheese, pulling you to torture through the prickly weeds,
    Please, attend forth to the words I speak…

    “Never approach the unknown with quick speed.”

    Cause see…Swift never wins the race, it’s always the,
    Tortoise with the appropriate pace, to save your face,
    Or to save you from having to do it, believe,
    The words, you heard from the pulpit, never was it bullshit,
    Or else you’ll be drowning yourself with the four fifths,
    Thinking forthwith, while draining the black sith, wisihin’,
    You could be laid in a casket, permission, granted,
    The choice is yours, but please, adhere to my sad implore,
    The matters of the heart you must soon explore,
    Can lead you to the heavens and beneath the floor.
    Before you act, think fast, memorize, It reads…

    “Never approach the unknown with quick speed.”

    Before I finish, knowing that the problems for we men are endless,
    To the day that we die, from our birth as infants,
    We’re conditioned to deal with the insens…….itivity,
    Not really two words, but it rhymes, so sue me…
    But do me, a favor, for all the men enjoying the Kitty Capers...
    Before you’re befallen of pervasion and rapers,
    Sabres erect, and ready to kill at will, worse than that white bitch
    Wanted to do to Bill, before your fate blows away
    Like a condomn on the windowsill, fuck tryin to rhyme
    Or be even, this shit is just too real, I must be real…
    Please wrap the steel; because it’s better than a raw deal…
    It feels about the same………………
    Matter of fact, fuck fucking and get brain…………
    Now I concede, my words hit? If not, you must re-read…

    “Never approach the unknown with dick speed.”

    Lickety Clit, Slicky the dick in the Deep Stickety, ick!
    Clickety Wick and Drip drippity drip, fickety dat shit!
    A Wickety Wack Wit, Fickety Fact Quick…………...
    If you can read this, something’s wrong with your ass,
    Shit……………………………………………………
    Bittersweet

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    nyce fuckin structure, and word play i hope to see more from u

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    You Need 2 links to decent feedback on others open mics or this will get closed.

    thanks.

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    This was a real good piece even i was was impressed and im an arrogant fuck so you get a lot of props from me.
    The concept was orginal which will always help any verse stand out.
    Your vocab was really strong so it helped you write some sick imagery this was a real thought provoking piece made me think a lot cant say i see that a lot on this board. I dont really give a fuck how people structure their rhymes but your structure was fine. The flow wasnt great but this piece was strong on vocab and imagery thats what made this piece really ill.
    There was loads of nice couplets but this one was mad nice:
    The matters of the heart you must soon explore
    Can lead you to the heavens and beneath the floor.

    Really good piece best ive read for a while.

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