*Peaches* vs. gone

[gone]

10-12 lines house rules
check in
due in an hour
blind spit
good luck

[*Peaches*]

tru aight then........ itz all good checkin in.........

[gone]

check

[*Peaches*]

*i tried but here's my verse*

So here I am battling this bitch ass mothafucka name gone
have this nigga in the church choir, at the top of his lungs singin a song
can’t rap at all 4real but good at givin lap dances
win this battle the first time, I neva give second chances
jus like spicy make him give me that good head after this battle done
thought he was a soldier, but this nigga walk around wit a toy gun
bitch just now learnin how to read and write, dumb as fuck
so sad how on the streetz he constantly get raped hard in the butt
beat you so quickly faster then the verses from twista
can’t neva get any bitchez so u stay home and fuck ya sista
niggah pimps up hoes down, im the pimp you my hoe
make u dress in some heels, and on the corner there you go

[gone]

im rich with my words like they was rhyming funded
and i'll fuck you in a verse worse than Spicy_one did
its some shit that we live in the same state but im the capitol
call me mickey-D's the pimp cause i stay big-mackin yall
james and the giant peach aint that sorta shit im into
you claim you aint a slut when the whole film's cast was in you
battlin me's pushin the envelope like shovin mailmen
ima hope you dont drop your lines to save yourself the failed-ten
cuz no one wants to read ya raps like gay incest secrets
and ima eat this MC like say, for instance, *peaches*

[StevieFresh]

this wuz kind of a weak battle but ima have ta give it ta peaches....no hate gone and no d/r but honestly ya verse wuz too weak i just thought peaches had harda punches

v/peaches

[*Peaches*]

thank you for that... i'll admitt... my verse was kinda shitty tho ha ha

[Gifted Signs]

ok Gone your verse wasn't all that good but you had the punches you need you could have worked on the creativity and wordplay and the flow but you had the punches and personals for the battle and Peaches you had a nice flow but you got to punch him harder and try to leave the sexual things out your verse you wordplay was pretty nice to and you creativity was okaycould have worked on it more but cause of the punches and personals gone got this battle heres the breakdown

flow-Peaches
punches-gone
personals-gone
creativity-both
wordplay-Peaches
structure-both

this was a okay battle just work on the things up above and you will elevate well

v/gone

[The problem]

gone- what the fuck, alot of ur shits didn't even rhyme homie. and u had some played concepts. work on harder punches cuz u had some s/g in that verse. ur verse was weak over all cuz u had nothin that inpressed me at all. make on harder punches, be more creative, and uses better vocabs then that. peaches, ur verse was better, atless u was dissin ur opponent, nice flow as well. structure was iight 2 and punches iight 2.

v/p

[*Peaches*]

thank you.... i did wut i could.... i coulda did better but thank u

[DaTrusHurtz]

So here I am battling this bitch ass mothafucka name gone
have this nigga in the church choir, at the top of his lungs singin a song
this isn't a punch really, just a statement.. how is this a diss?
can’t rap at all 4real but good at givin lap dances
win this battle the first time, I neva give second chances
another statement really, no punch to it
jus like spicy make him give me that good head after this battle done
thought he was a soldier, but this nigga walk around wit a toy gun
this could have been okay worded differently.. I woulda said in the punchline "What kinda real soldiers walks around with toy guns".. not much difference, but it hits much harder the way i did it
bitch just now learnin how to read and write, dumb as fuck
so sad how on the streetz he constantly get raped hard in the butt
ewww, don't use gay jokes
beat you so quickly faster then the verses from twista
can’t neva get any bitchez so u stay home and fuck ya sista
same here, this is pretty gay, don't use fuck jokes either
niggah pimps up hoes down, im the pimp you my hoe
make u dress in some heels, and on the corner there you go
nah, this isn't a punch either

vs.

im rich with my words like they was rhyming funded
and i'll fuck you in a verse worse than Spicy_one did
personal, but could be better
its some shit that we live in the same state but im the capitol
call me mickey-D's the pimp cause i stay big-mackin yall
self-glory, this was lame
james and the giant peach aint that sorta shit im into
you claim you aint a slut when the whole film's cast was in you
kinda funny, but no
battlin me's pushin the envelope like shovin mailmen
ima hope you dont drop your lines to save yourself the failed-ten
weak punch, but a punch never the less
cuz no one wants to read ya raps like gay incest secrets
and ima eat this MC like say, for instance, *peaches*
self-glory

Overall, both of you came with and with a lot of gay/sex/played punches and you both had some self-glory. After reading the verses a few times though, I think gone had the best lines of the battle and took this but it was close. Both of you guys need to elevate so take some of my advice to help you.

Vote - Gone

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=222711

[*Peaches*]

yea tru tru... thank u doe... itz all good..........

[*Peaches*]

.........uppin for more votes......... uppin.......

[Zed Peace]

seriously couldn't see anything much in peache's verse so no hate just elevate. it looks like it has flow but when you actually read it you sound like your just talking about random threats.
Gone wasn't really feeling you since you didn't bother to put in strong multis but thats ok:

james and the giant peach aint that sorta shit im into
you claim you aint a slut when the whole film's cast was in you

^found it kinda funny. not witty though just an example of direct punches. keep up the good work i'ma give this vote to you gone. so good here.

v/ gone

[*Peaches*]

.......aight thatz cool with me.... no big deal....