Vivid Images(dont sleep)

[woozy]

my vivid images,i spit towards timid lyricist
my schripture's simerin,im spittin serius
so sleep on me, dont gimmy respect i deserve
so wut,get on my turf,u get on my nerves
i dont shoot but,wen they pop blood splattas
wen they pop, believe evry thug scattaz
i sever fa eva ,constant cause of terror
wut eva wen eva,concius causes errors
west warwick aint a gutta,but aint no sub
i got boys tuckin,a 22, yah aint no snub
scam got that 22, cheapa got tha 38
bullets run right thru, bust ya vertibre
i aint own one,but i got fuckin access
picture it dog,u not fuckin rappaz
rap aint about gats n shootin stupid
its bout who can do it,and whos tha truest

[EyeBite]

wow, do you drop like 5 a day, save sum rhymes for other dayz, anywayz all i can say is that this was too short the rhymes were good, this seemed thought in a second, you cant just keep droppin Oms like this, you cant alwazy be in the spot light, just kep it up, and keep droppin, but no like evry day though, be patient and wait for sum feed, thats what i do and i up it too so you should do that too, i think everyone that has experience does that, peace

-skribble

[woozy]

iight

[Daz]

Eghhhhhhhh what can i say.

first of all.

you need to have a structure.
You have to have a more expansive vocab..
you need a topic
you need a everything.

this is cool for audio but not here son.

go read mine

From His View

and get the hang of it.

[Untold.]

Looks decent son. I'm agreeing with Daz on this. Not bad, but go to audio. It would be better there. Its still good man. I'm feeling it. Peep mine and leave feed back. Holla...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...57#post2900057

[sILLable]

you do need elevation...your vocab..your wordplay...you need more multis...you need some complexity....choose a topic and be consistent with it..keep elevatin.~1~

[woozy]

thanks fa feed

[$<-Lucci->$]

Yo this is a nice piece.
good flow and rhymes.
good structure and topic.
whats bad: length/ couldve made longer.
voacb/ was basic, elavate words.

over all decent

if rated:5/10