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Thread: The Glass Was Half Full

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    The Glass Was Half Full

    The Glass Was Half Full

    The life of my Handicapped Son



    Majority captured his appearance as half empty, I sore plenty within
    Authority enraptured perseverance gifting handicapped with thicker skin
    My next of kin, unstable to strangers, able to change if given a chance
    But if the books cover appears simple, pages are only granted a glance
    My friend’s glasses overflowing, growing, mine reluctant to surge
    As they purchase more and more drinks..
    ..Links to alcohol see the fights emerge
    I spend nights on the verge of tears, the years witness our heart ache
    My larger goes flat, their bottles of wine mature with time like their taste
    Placed in this situation our family’s destination is becoming scary
    Faced with isolation being patient, do I need that full glass to feel merry?
    No average berry, starved from fermentation so development is minute
    I place blame on myself..
    ..a tasteful wine isn’t produced without beginning with tasteful fruit
    a wasteful route is mapped for my son, his life has begun at the end
    if he’s living it backwards, his maturity with time can only descend
    I try to comprehend with my love, but it’s a struggle without a perk
    If one half isn’t focused then you’re facing double the amount of work
    His brain lurks between shadows, none elite how does my child compete?
    Without a strong head on top, some suggest the larger is incomplete
    My emotions so discrete, I retreat to being positive overall
    Encouraging his love for football, knowing hell never be on the ball
    And God will call my son in his prime, with time left to kill
    His life left to fulfill minus the alcohol..
    ..my son lived short and corrupted, his life as a pill.


    R.I.P To all those lives taken early to disabilities.

    Signed

    Jill Godfrey son of Andrew Godfrey who past away this year.


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    ight...

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    Great piece. Had vocabulary, good flow, good meaning, extremely deep with emotion and I could feel every line. The only thing I could find even a tad bit wrong, was the flow in certain places. Other than that, another dope piece K.

    9.5/10

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    K this was a real dope piece.. I liked the emotion that this had because it was very strong and I loved how it was described.. The imagery was nice hard to picture in some places but it was good.. The flow was was consistent and the internals made this piece easy to read.. Overall a real good drop filled with great qualitys..

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    thanks guys...eh yo fores man long time get at me on aim

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    -Bounce-

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    good vocab, good flow, good subject, deep emotion, imagery was nice. This piece was real dope

    9/10

    stay up K

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    uh what up!

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    it nice like your flow and you content on how you came your dope man ive you props decent verse need some structure though good shit *walks away crying cuz k did read my OM in the sig*

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    damn that was amazing! i dont normally get excited when reading things anymore, but this one got me blushing. absolutly brillant, everything was on point here. the ryhming seemed effortless and the transitions were perfect. the emotion was very true and heartfelt and the way you put everything together so smoothly has me in awe. i dunno if this is already nominated but i will put it down for sure. wow, i havent been this excited over an om in months very impressive. sorry it is getting slept on.

    please return the favor
    my om: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...02#post2676102
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    Music --->>>>
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    Djb pm your aim and ill get at you about your piece.

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    It's Lager. No R.

    phuckin americans spelling like shit.

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    im english you prick...and liverpool fo life yo!

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