Head In The Clouds (Feat. Bruklor)

[Dan Dare]

Head In The Clouds

I walk into the examination centre, I’m late. Naturally, the
congregation look up at me. I don’t look to them, I walk
straight to my seat; solemnly, quietly. The examiner gives
me the paper, and the answer book, and we begin.

***

Staring straight at the paper; my attention tapers, my mind’s blank
That’s when my heart sank; there’s a weakness in my shanks –
The cogs and cranks in my head, grinding, this oblivion, is arcane
Feeling like everything is waning; I flutter away, like an archangel
I could not bare, the glare of the teacher’s eyes,
Bearing down on me – before me, my ugly spirit has been baptized
I feel I’m drifting on clouds, from whence does this feeling arise?
Surmise what you will, sorority played not a part in my demise
I feel I’m the kind to get my head stuck, in stranger skies
Blankness is the music my mind replays, and reprises
I punish myself mentally, because I need to be chastised,
World-weariness is the patent force, of nature’s whim
I’ve got to nurture myself, into consciousness, like now or later
Come back to reality! My parents; what will I say to them?
Once I'd sat myself, in that chair ..
.. It’s as if my brain cell’s have been denatured
But all I really need to do, is set this pen to this piece of paper


I wander aimlessly inward, as the clock ticks down...

Walk onto campus, cocky and arrogant.
Apparent failure. Pants full of balls,
backpack full of music and beer.

Indecision to exactly which division this even is?
Parallax of attitude. Guess I should have listened
Studying would possibly be a wise investment
Instead of drinking at that bloody delicatessen
A smart idea would have been to pay attention
And not buy rounds for those two blessed twins
Known for being drunk on the campus ground
Nicknamed the regular Delta-Booze-Hound
Everyone I know I’ve at least felt up
Turning into your friendly neighborhood slut
Haven’t held a stick of graphite for a month
Looking at a piece of paper illuminates rust
And as more collects, here brink’s collapse
Only building is a memory of drinking contacts
I’m drunk, so fuck it, I’ll finish this paper…
… Much, much later.

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[Dan Dare]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...39#post2508039
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...10#post2578810

[Trema]

This piece was complete......dopeness


I have rated K as dope because i know he is and now i'm rating you as dope

For real your vocab was spot on in this piece. I have flikd a few of yo pieces b4 but this 1 stud out. Your structure was nice i liked the way you placed them it sootd the piece! Homs also i liked the topic, u explained it in the fullest and with complete dopeness! nice 1 jek,

[Phourz]

I think dis Peice was Hot......Started off pretty Raw...Kept a Constant Flow and Ryhme Scheme...Overall just a Good drop...but didnt like how da other part was written on da other side.....but def. a Raw Peice

8/10 Ill DRop dueces

[Vertikle]

Dopeness.................Imagery was there......Structure was nice..............and the flow was hot as fuck...imagery was there...also you had a good choice of vocabulary and I liked it......Keep dropping ya shit man.......9/10

[Bruklor]

I like all this "you", as in Jekyll talk. :P

[Dan Dare]

Lol.. yeah.

I put your verse on left alignment, so that people would notice it, and figure out that it was you, since your name was in the title too. I guess nobody was paying attention though, huh?

[Colby Cain]

Damn do I no relate to dat shit, Its like starin at a mirror of words. Both droped sick, Jekyll was a lil better in the overall vocab and language use but Bruklor had some good lines, kinda felt he was the more hung over of the two. Nice drop, keep doin ya thing both of you.

vote my battle against knuckles ya you want be dissapionted
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=203978

[J.J]

Jekyll that was a nice piece. the flow was pretty good and it was easy to follow. Great job on the vocabulary. It looks like you put a lot of time and work in to this piece. The structure was pretty good too. My only suggestion is that yo make it just a bit shorter since i dont think many people would want to spend a lot of time reading just one thread. But overall it was an awesome job. I'd give you a 9.5/10. Keep up the good work and have a nice day.

[Bruklor]

Lol.. yeah.

I put your verse on left alignment, so that people would notice it, and figure out that it was you, since your name was in the title too. I guess nobody was paying attention though, huh?

I'm really not in it for the attention, so it's cool.


But, I do love the comment about being hungover, by Colby Cain... Well Cobly, as this was written by me, it was most likely written while drunk or hungover. I also didn't want to go with the same approach as Jek for the verse, so, I did another side of Uni/College.

[Colby Cain]

Ya I noticed the difference in the flow and technique, made it more enjoyable to see two different sides of it. Yo peep my battle against knuckles and for for http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=203978

[Dan Dare]

Don't ask us to vote on battles. I, personally, don't give a shit about them, I doubt Bruk' does either.

I'll return feed on Open Mics.

[Details]

I Got To Say I Like The Way You Stutrue Your OM Very Different,
And Good Choice Of Words You Did Stay Basic With Basic Words.
And I Could Flow Your Flow Real Good.Imagery was there I Can
Tell You Put Some Decent Work In To This Keep Up The Good Work.
RTF ON My OM Its Where Am I ? Just Tell Me If You Want A Link.

[N-Demik]

This is a nice mix of not being on the same earthly planes (If you wanna call it that)..I like how you described your day dreaming Dan...that's always the way in exams....to fall into a world of nothingness and forget the damn paper LOL..I'm always doing it. Nice writing dude, as always, very neat.

And Jamie....so this is where your verse about drunkeness appears...haha. I know your verse was not that serious but it kind of sums you up....naw mean

Nice collab.

[Dan Dare]

Thankyouuu!

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