Never Leave Your Side

[blackriverrat]

The only thing i wanted to do was get closer to you
But you acted like i comited a crime
All that was is you trying to mask your internal rhyme
When i see you I find my self trying the bask in your light
But you left me in an international flight
But i awalys think of you when the sun is replaced with moon light
And the height of my day is when i see you smile
To break out I need a file
I may not have artistic style but i hope you understand
If not just ask a question
And if you dont ill have natural depression
But if you ask i can give an anwser
I may not have money like a financer
But ill survive at work i just wont take five
Ill awalys open up to like a cd drive
I just hope you know ill never leave your side

[mostghetto]

iight it was all basic rhymes so u need to elevate and keep the flo it was off and on
5/10 and im feelin generous

[Vicious Breed]

the rhyme sceme was not that great flow was a lil off structure wasnt that great
had a bit of emotion which is good
but use wordplay mulis and such i rate probly a 5/10

[Dan Dare]

You need to get two links, to two OMs you left decent feedback on, or this gets closed, thanks.

[blackriverrat]

what about the ones in my sig?

[Dan Dare]

Okay. In future you need to paste them into a post in the thread though. And it would be good if you could leave longer feedback as well.

[Big Blind]

yeah best lines

But ill survive at work i just wont take five
Ill awalys open up to like a cd drive
I just hope you know ill never leave your side

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