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    Exclamation "one mic"

    This is a couple of verses i did ta da one mic beat....

    Da only way i knew how to confide/was to put ma words inta a rhyme/and tell you how ma lifes been fa da past 10 years/had ta sell rocks fa some dimes/dat brought fears, and tears ta ma moms eyes/but everybody need dimes when dey in da grind/dat was da worst time no food on da table tonight/no one ta come home and talk to/ma mom talkin bout me like im not in da area/me writin dis song is probably breakin some bearers/everytime i talk to her da situation gets hairya/i know aint supposed ta hate her cuz she was ma carrya/im tough cuz ma life was rough/basically didnt have a dad when i was bein raised/now im grown all hell is bein raised/da stress of school gettin ta me/mom steadily always seems ta be blamin me/cant nearly stand me/ askin me questions like/why am i so bad?/why do insist on makin her mad?/ why do i keep doin what im doin?/why wont i stop before i end up losin?/saturday school every saturday/anotha damn saturday bein takin away/ma grades droppin like da world trade/while havin dreams ta sell a million like nwa/look outside ma window/anotha house gettin raid/look around ma school half of deez kids got aids/look in ma mirror i nearly seen a runaway/but dat neva took action cuz i stayed/if you wanna hate on me/i'll drop you like lakewood highschool planned ta drop me/but if you really wanna test me/we could do it professionally wit da pc/ shoot off 3 bullets ta blow ya lid fa everyone of gotti's grandkids/watch closely,as i make da tables turn/wasnt given dis ma slot was earned/spit fire dat will burn/listen closely, and ya might learn/as i put dis in ma perspective/ya not aids infected/but infected wit ma music dats bein spreaded/i give credit ,ta none otha but myself fa standin up when i was bein rejected/needles inject,none otha den love fa dis game inta ma veins/dere was time when i thought da stars was as far as fame/told ma peoples if i made it i wouldnt leave da game da same/ if dats a feleny i should be da one ta blame/ill make you lose conciousness when i spit/im not cha hit man im ya hit girl,dats it/ima felon wen it comes ta dis/make all kinds of hits/you could see it in ma prints/got ma heart inta dis like a motha in da mornin cookin eggs and grits/cuz when im on da microphone/i make statements yall could relate wit and step wit/even though where i came from wasnt all dat good/i guess u could call it jersey's infamous hood/cuz i came from sittin in ma room/in da jungle next ta john street/rappin da line clean ta da beat/droppin steam like rakim n eric b./da jungle is where i was brought up/ but isnt where u wanted ta get caught up/da jungle aint where u was meant ta last/ a lot of hidden secrets unda dat visible glass/any wrong information couldve meant one blast/but we had our laughs on da block/ but den again i always knew in da bak of ma head/i had ta keep ma shit cocked/had ta have da glock/incase a bitch tryed ta rob me of ma money blocks/we lived dangerous fa a while/ blood stains permanetly attached ta da tiles/could hear anotha person bein layed from a mile/ but dat was da dark side of dis game/ no sunshine/jus clouds and rain/wen u think of hard times in da ghetto u think of crime/and how we even found da right time ta sit down and write rhymes....

    tell me what u think of dat,and tell da truth yall...

    jersey bitch till i die
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    poetic stature but you might use stanza format this had powerful emotion that can command attention easily some lines were iffy buty for the most part i think you projected real skillz and with minor elivation i can see you as an elite emcee stay posting
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    iight thanx fa de advice

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    hit my post if u can
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    The structure was terrible homie but it was iight had some good imagry in there this peice would be betta off as an audio see cuz when people see this they most likely wont read the whole thing but im not speak'n fo everybody its jus the way you formatted ya kno jus fix it up and you'll do find good job i can't really tell where each verse ended ya kno but an good effort was put forth
    Where the fuck was I fore they found me?
    Floatn in a meadow, dragonflies all around me
    Seeded in a ghetto, smokin cigarellos
    Stress oceans try to drown me
    Walking on water like when Christ did, glidin
    Mic in my plam like the trident in the hand of Poseidon

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    verse1

    Da only way i knew how to confide/
    was to put ma words inta a rhyme/
    and tell you how ma lifes been fa da past 10 years/
    had ta sell rocks fa some dimes/
    dat brought fears, and tears ta ma moms eyes/
    but everybody need dimes when dey in da grind/
    dat was da worst time no food on da table tonight/
    no one ta come home and talk to/
    ma mom talkin bout me like im not in da area/
    me writin dis song is probably breakin some bearers/
    everytime i talk to her da situation gets hairya/
    i know aint supposed ta hate her cuz she was ma carrya/

    verse2
    im tough cuz ma life was rough/
    basically didnt have a dad when i was bein raised/
    now im grown all hell is bein raised/
    da stress of school gettin ta me/
    mom steadily always seems ta be blamin me/
    cant nearly stand me/
    askin me questions like/
    why am i so bad?/
    why do insist on makin her mad?/
    why do i keep doin what im doin?/
    why wont i stop before i end up losin?/
    verse3

    saturday school every saturday/
    anotha damn saturday bein takin away/
    ma grades droppin like da world trade/
    while havin dreams ta sell a million like nwa/
    look outside ma window/
    anotha house gettin raid/
    look around ma school half of deez kids got aids/
    look in ma mirror i nearly seen a runaway/
    but dat neva took action cuz i stayed/
    if you wanna hate on me/
    i'll drop you like lakewood highschool planned ta drop me/
    but if you really wanna test me/
    we could do it professionally wit da pc/
    shoot off 3 bullets ta blow ya lid fa everyone of gotti's grandkids/
    verse4

    watch closely,as i make da tables turn/
    wasnt given dis ma slot was earned/
    spit fire dat will burn/
    listen closely, and ya might learn/
    as i put dis in ma perspective/
    ya not aids infected/
    but infected wit ma music dats bein spreaded/
    i give credit ,ta none otha but myself fa standin up when i was bein rejected/
    needles inject,none otha den love fa dis game inta ma veins/
    dere was time when i thought da stars was as far as fame/
    told ma peoples if i made it i wouldnt leave da game da same/
    if dats a feleny i should be da one ta blame/
    ill make you lose conciousness when i spit/
    im not cha hit man im ya hit girl,dats it/
    ima felon wen it comes ta dis/
    make all kinds of hits/
    you could see it in ma prints/
    got ma heart inta dis like a motha in da mornin cookin eggs and grits/
    verse5

    cuz when im on da microphone/
    i make statements yall could relate wit and step wit/
    even though where i came from wasnt all dat good/
    i guess u could call it jersey's infamous hood/
    cuz i came from sittin in ma room/
    in da jungle next ta john street/
    rappin da line clean ta da beat/
    droppin steam like rakim n eric b./
    da jungle is where i was brought up/
    but isnt where u wanted ta get caught up/
    da jungle aint where u was meant ta last/
    a lot of hidden secrets unda dat visible glass/
    any wrong information couldve meant one blast/
    but we had our laughs on da block/
    but den again i always knew in da bak of ma head/
    i had ta keep ma shit cocked/
    had ta have da glock/
    incase a bitch tryed ta rob me of ma money blocks/
    we lived dangerous fa a while/
    blood stains permanetly attached ta da tiles/
    could hear anotha person bein layed from a mile/
    but dat was da dark side of dis game/
    no sunshine/
    jus clouds and rain/
    wen u think of hard times in da ghetto u think of crime/
    and how we even found da right time ta sit down and write rhymes....

    if dats a better structure let me know

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    That shit gay

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    close this has no links and klass your finna get banned^^

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