Rules:
20-35 lines
topic: Mercy On My Soul
no hate votes
must drop 2 days after checking in.
Rules:
20-35 lines
topic: Mercy On My Soul
no hate votes
must drop 2 days after checking in.
ight yo im checking in....
be sure to drop not no show like half my oppenents do.
na ill do my best this my second topical.. i wont b spitting to night got boxing... ill drop 2 mo peace out
Mercy on my Soul
I’m surrounded by people, that just don’t really-Understand
Why aint I respected, can’t I get let loose and freely-on-Land
It wasn’t my choice to grow up, all full of the worst-Frustration
My life forced temptation, nothing ever but cursed-Sensation
I ask why my mom and dad always fight for a better-Salvation
Not a very good combination, can’t I get a letter-of-Admiration
When I come home from school, my mom asks why I’m so Angry
The way she commands me, makes me feel like I’m in the Navy
All I wanted to do was play basketball instead of being-Grounded
She trys to be the one in control, when she isn’t seeing-the-Throne
My mom will point her finger, saying I should stick-to-Education
I’m bound never to learn fast, but I tried to fit with-Elevation
But the funny thing was, she never told me to do my-Homework
And still I’ve been getting decent marks sense I’d lie-to-the-Jerk
Where is all the mercy, I’m sick of being forced to live in this-Nation
I need an explanation, why I was born to reminisce-in-Desperation
If I had 1 wish, I’d wish for god to forgive me for Trespassing
But I’m glad I was born with parents that make my life Embarrassing
Its better then not having parents, they show me real Mercy
Then my future wont be bad, I wont have to feel-Surgery
god always hated me and lever let me be,
never let me fullfill my dreams, never had mercy on me,
im forced to work hard and that i can accept,
but the way i live my life ive got nothing to regret,
ive done what i can to be sorry for my sins,
go to church n pray to god, even broke my limbs,
repenting every night, in case i die in my sleep,
if i was to die tonight, no one will weep,
my hearts bleak, the punding slowly cumin to a end,
the never ending story, this pain you just cannot mend,
bowing down, to show the lord apprectation,
but i now were im goin wen i die, no nagotiation,
please have mercy on my soul when i may leave,
ive always knew you were they, and always did believe,
i was bound buy the chains of my hatred,
always pulled buy the devil, always bein slated,
my parent never loved me, gave me acceptance,
they tried to leave me at birth, at the hospital reception,
god had mercy and gave a goodlife,
growing up on the right side of the tracks, but still carried a knife,
my heart bleeds cause i can never ever see the pain,
the suffereing of the whole world, il never feel again,
screaming mercy, mercy, as im dragged down to hell,
no love loss in life, no regrets as you can tell,
god never gave me mercy showed no remocre,
i got my cumupence, in all due corse,
i lay bleeding beggin for gods approval,
so my soul mercy, as my bodys in removal,
i say again cause ive always tried my best,
please so me mercy, cause i have passed your test.
not my best but i only done this 2ce
yo i gotta go for my boy killa. i never voted on a topical but yo he had some nice lines and tight flow. he obviously used the two day drop as his advantage. good work homie keep up the good work.
RTF.
V/KILLA
uppin 1
Yo Killa Solja Return The Favor Dogg. U Forgot To Poll Ur Vote On My Battle.
its done homies... aite peace
Just Make Sure U Poll Ur Vote, Cause If Udont I Aint Gunna Vote For U Man Anymore. Thats Not Right, Rtf.
aite i have i swear.... can u RTF gainst... RG3
Killa Solja-Meh. Not bad. Structure needs work, but the flow was good. You stayed on topic which was good, but at some points i felt you fell off a lil bit. Not bad of a verse. Try to be a lil bit more creative and be more direct. Get to the point with less fillers. Good job though.
Relinquished-[b]Hmm..not bad. Nice structure which made it easy to read and the flow and punches to be on point. Good job though. Nice verse.
Overall: Relen
Reason: I felt his verse was more direct and hit harder. Not bad from both. Good job and keep it comin
tnx... this is my 2nd topical tho... tnx anyways.. uppin
ight stop posting killa or i will dq you that is already 5 ups. ima let it go but just stop.
o and thanks for the vote ayduu.
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