::SS::Life through the eyes of a serial killer

[K9_THESHIT]

Life through the eyes of a serial killer




August 3rd 1560

Oh my belle…Death has taken your fiery breath from me,
Briery dread towards me to awaken me in hell,
In a painful jail because of their disdainful spell…
Treachery! Cruel boyars hating my rule,
At every step a fool like from a hatchery of ghouls,
They have stolen the jewel of my soul,
The fuel of my life,
For me to crawl in the pool of the rivers I’ve cried…
Inside : arctic shivers thirsty for revenge,
You my beauty have died…but you shall be avenged…



March 11 1567

The infested streets of Moscow are condemned,
Indigested beats of the past slam my jammed reason,
It could be any one of them…
Treason! Poisoned sheets damned by demons,
Shape shifting villains hiding in passing seasons
from my unforgiving hate,
Because late into the dark I am drifting
into a non-living state of mind,
Breathing fire as I wait the swine devils to cross my path,
My loss to fuel my blind wrath,
Leaving souls intertwined with other’s spine
in a huge blood bath…
A sword bleeds in my trembling hand,
Like squeezed thorns from a rose
as I pulverize to dust and sand the diseased souls,
Pull out their eyes for their planned plots and lies,
Because the deceased patrols every night in disguise,
Seeding demise as hanged corpses rot near the market walls…
Women and children decapitated,
Men slaughtered in numbers of ten,
Blood flowing like falls from casket holes,
Even tombs desecrated and the dead murdered again…
It is hell…



The rusty bloody blade reflects my nights,
A dusty cascade of hate ignites my rage to the highest heights…
With blood he writes:
Nobody shall escape the assignment since my cruel re-birth,
My Earth is empty and inert…
...I am Ivan the Fourth…

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[Johnny 6-feet]

as ever K9, a great topic with stunning imagery. i felt you really got inside the head of the charecter you were protraying with solid vocab and an original rhymne. Short but sweet, i reckon you should expand this into a full track and make it an audio my friend.

good stuff, keep posting.

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[2hot2handle]

That was cool an interesting cause I never see shit like this. It gives me dark images and is in a history form. The dates were interesting so u were probably being some character from back then. The structure was good, some cool metaphors and it painted a picture that makes ya think. Ya spit it in a story version and that was good.

[nolonger]

The rusty bloody blade reflects my nights,
A dusty cascade of hate ignites my rage to the highest heights…
With blood he writes:
Nobody shall escape the assignment since my cruel re-birth,
My Earth is empty and inert…
...I am Ivan the Fourth…


dope rhyme scheme here and i nice eneding...nice peice man.

[K9_THESHIT]

thx for the feeds guys...uppin

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[Trojan]

i liked the tpic it was cool...........i like the flow 2 you did a good job

[K9_THESHIT]

^Wow! All that feed for me?! Thanks for making time dawg! Holla!

[Ïçê ~Ð~]

Man that was really really impressive, you had a great topic to start of, you told it like a story and it rhymed perfectly which made me respect your style, you were telling your story like you were in 1st person view and made the reader feel like he was there too, so... it was very impressive again, plus the vocab was really nice and the structure was good
On the whole I just loved it, keep writing, and yeah honestly I think it can be great on audio if make it a lil longer
Peace \\//

[warchild]

This was another dope piece i think your starting to use your vocab properly now your not just using the big words for the sake it ever.
Your imagery is your biggest strength it was a good story you kept it consistent throughout i enjoyed reading it unlike most oms on here you never seem to write bullshit so you get props for that and most of your pieces are original so i think youve got skills. The only thing i could say for you to improve on was the flow what i mean by flow is the syllable count most cats know what im talking about when i say flow. Your pieces are sick cause of your vocab and imagery but if you upped the flow your pieces would be even crazier.Peace.

Can you return the feed:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=191223

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thanks for the feeds...uppin

[Deviate]

This was a nice piece... Tight competition between you and Key... You both took a similar approach to the topic which was interesting. You wrote well around it... Great vocabulary and imagery. The metaphors in this were excellent. It was a manageable length, unlike mine heh.... I enjoy your work K9, you write with confidence and are consistant with your drops. One day you, Issue, Na and I will work together on a piece.... See what comes out.

Nice work...

Peace

[K9_THESHIT]

Thanks Dev...Will surely collab sometime and hopefully get that side project going soon...But Na's really busy right now,and i've been really busy too.Maybe next week...

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