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[YoungHusla]

Young Husla: Intorducing 321 kid.....repping tha same area code that I am...you ready kid, drop your shit....

~321Kid~
young hustla and...... three two one kid
we'll make ones head bleed through... ones lid
i diss the average rappers..... cuz theyre boring
we dont play in 321.. ....and thats a true story
we give dead serious....... a new meaning
sometimes i take out one leg..... to leave u leaning
the people round here, ......r crooks w/ out deals
when this music dont sell,...... i gotta rob and steal
gun shots and graffitti ......are common sights
see people throwin up gang signs...... and causin fights
not alot of careers take off from da bay,... yo
except 4 ones that involve dealin ......yayo
my style is what alot of yall rappers..... are cravin
but i rap up some nightmares...... like wes craven
we bring heat so real,..... u can feel it touch ya
straight out the 321,.... here comes my man young hustla

~Young_Husla~

People always talking about Compton...how its so hard
Compton aint' got shit.......on University Boul-E-Vard
Every person repping the 321...is dropping science and carrying heat
Gang Bangers here are crazy.....they'lll fucking cut off your feet
See bitches getting killed .......cause they stole some weed
When all they needed was some money for their babies to feed
Peace is what we need,...... but war is what we seek
You'll get dropped by twin glocks just for talking when your told not to speak
The 321........ aint just no launch countdown no more
Its a sanctum for dealers, killers, and the ILLest surrounded by whores
University Boulevard, .....321s most notorious hood
Each side of teh street is banging hood tracks by No Good
And the University Boxing Club, where I go and fight
Its a place where juveniles, and ex-dealers go to make their lives right
In the 321, you got to sleep with a hand-gun grasped in your hand
Make sure its cocked and loaded......or else your sure to get canned
Walking these streets no carrying a piece and your sure to get shot
Me and 321Kid repping this town to the fullest.....aint never gunna stop

[Bounce]

First verse outshined the second verse technically as meter is concerned. I wont get too indepth here since this was a very basic type of peice, so let my just say the meter in the second verse was lacking in comparision. Diction was horrible, but like I mentioned for this type of verse it was expected. Just a bunch of did to death type of lines, something we all seen before and are growing very tired of. Try changing up the concept come original and complex, you can show of your flow in a elevated tyope verse if you pay great attention to meter and assonance. I liked the first verse, as it was composed with meter in mind I guess, the second one seemed oblvious to this component of the write. Work on incorperating a non conventional rhyme shceme, make it fresh and original...

[rhymeking14]

uppin............................................. ......

[rhymeking14]

yo that was pretty crazy stuff,husla you had some crazy lines,good lookin

This type of garbage ass reply is no longer welcom here in OM.
-Bounce

[rhymeking14]

the flow was pretty weak on the second verse but the lines and rhymes were hott. the rouph area theme and braggin about guns is a little played out but overall i would rate it a 7/10. keep workin at it tho

[AL CAPONE]

yo thats hot man keep on workin at it wasnt feelin ur flow man so just work on that aight overall verses rate - 8.5/10

[Bounce]

^ Aimed at the dude above capone...I warned you one too many times today, edit that post with some decent feed back or you will be banned...