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    The True Psycho of RB
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    Mentally Challenged

    Im the type to blow my brains out then let my soul dance in the red mist
    Im in a mental hospital cause i got caught licking out a 90 year old dead bitch
    Smoking weed is my day job, i stay odd, i'll slay god
    With a crucifix, my style get used to it, psychos they nod
    When i drop these rhymes, cock these dimes, cant stop these crimes
    That im commiting daily, tommorows come, you carry hollow guns
    I was born scarred shit, you porn star bitch, you swallow cum
    You a wack fuck, go ahead act up, you talk about your gat bust Your insecure about the gay porn under your matress
    I'll cut off your daddys face then wear it as i rape ya mother
    Im still lethal, i kill people, and i still cannot escape the hunger
    When you say the number loud is the only time you blast a nine
    Id slaughter quentin taratino, uma thurman and kill bill to pass the time
    I rap with charisma and confidence you just spit doubt
    Your the type to take a girl home and smile when she pulls her dick out
    You aint tight or ill your friends just get you gassed up
    You'd probably go to jail on purpose just to get ass fucked
    Have you noticed i switched my flow up, hit my ho up
    Mcs wanna nick my flow but, my wits like woah slut
    Ask any bitch from 18 to 80 my dick powers great
    Gotta go this hookers been sucking my dick for six hours straight

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    it was iight but da flow was off

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    Ehud
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    U dont know wat ur talking about ^^^ flow is not off.. ur jes not reading it the way it was meant to be read... pump up adrenaline rush type shit. and if u were reading it with that attitude then u should of figured out that were the rhymes are off is the finisher of the chaper to spark a new one... this one here
    You a wack fuck, go ahead act up, you talk about your gat bust Your insecure about the gay porn under your matress
    ^^ see where the two rhymes rite.. now imagine finishing off the beat b4 it goes to the hook... with matress.. like ending the paragraph bro.. doesn't have to rhyme with anything but if u do audios then u would know wat I know...

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    fewface
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    Quote Originally Posted by Ehud
    U dont know wat ur talking about ^^^ flow is not off.. ur jes not reading it the way it was meant to be read... pump up adrenaline rush type shit. and if u were reading it with that attitude then u should of figured out that were the rhymes are off is the finisher of the chaper to spark a new one... this one here
    You a wack fuck, go ahead act up, you talk about your gat bust Your insecure about the gay porn under your matress
    ^^ see where the two rhymes rite.. now imagine finishing off the beat b4 it goes to the hook... with matress.. like ending the paragraph bro.. doesn't have to rhyme with anything but if u do audios then u would know wat I know...

    HAHAHAHHAHAHAA...EHUD...you cant claim audio til ya do one...lol...

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    Decent shit son...structure was a lil abnormal for my likings...kinda elemental n shit...like ya gotta figure it out before ya get it and shit...works...just not my type a think shit...Overall pretty cool...Watch the simple rhymes...

    ~1~

    ~Lyrics_ES_CH~

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    The True Psycho of RB
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    Appreciate the feed my flow is always nice but my structure was a bit off in this piece because i was doing a lot of inside rhyme patterns so its difficult to keep the bars to the exact same length.

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    gat bust and matress do kinda rhyme Ehud...

    not a bad piece...some funny shit and some nice multi's
    Eminem - Slim Shady Lp type joint

    keep up

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    prolific
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    nice piece good for a battle
    i liked the multis in each line bro keep it up

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    You had some funny ideas mixed in with raw lines. They worked well for the piece. Having the lines not be exact is worth sacrificing to get in your multis. The verse would sound good to audio, it flows nicely. The wordplay was needed in the verse, and having it definitely brought up the quality.
    Thanks for checkin out mine.

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    This was weak

    same ol shit.....
    blah blah blah Im dope, blah blah blah im gansta blah blah
    This was uncreative and boring...disses were all played
    keep writin
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    You've Earned a Custom Title! Deucedeucecuz's Avatar
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    u got a madd flow kid,this hot im gonna go check out some of ur other stuff
    :hung:

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    This is nothing more than a below avarage battle type verse. We no longer welcome that sort verse here in OM. You can go to frontline and or the cypher for this stuff. Please read and follow the new aditon to OM rules. Not bad, just not very good. Nothing elevated ot conceptually original, conventional rhyme scheme with a meter that was lacking. Sure you used multi's and the lines rhymed, but that style os way to played out, try something complex and original next time.

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    ^^word

    ur rap, just wasnt very good kid

    kepp elevating
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    This jank was tight, the first couple of lines caught my attention, sounds like it was off the top....good post playa...



    ---Nexxlevel.......is there anybody that ain't under me?

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    Ehud
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    dude ur funny fewface... hahahahah... ur jes hilarious.. hahahahah... **dies laughing**.... mayne u dont even know wat im doing bro... jes focus on ur battles allrite.. go on.. I wreck studio's son unlike ur computer rhyming ass.. hahahaha

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