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    Torn Picture

    EVER SINCE A LIL KID

    IVE BEEN A TORN PICTURE

    COZ THE PAIN

    OF NOT HAVIN A FATHER

    PUT ME IN A TWISTER

    REACHIN OUT

    BUT NEVER BEEN REACHED

    BY MY FAMILY

    THEY TRIED

    BUT COULDN’T UNDERSTAND ME

    I DIDN’T KNOW WHO TO TURN TO

    IN MY TIME OF NEED

    PPL SHOWED ME WEED

    BUT IT WAS THE TOOL OF THE DEVIL

    MADE ME CURSE THE WORLD

    HAVE I BEEN MENTIONED

    I DON’T THINK SO



    GREW UP WITH FONEY BROTHERS

    WHO TALKED ABOUT ME

    THEY USED TO BACK BIT

    THEY WERE SOUR

    AND DISGUST ME

    SHOWING ME THAT I COULDN’T TRUST NOBODY

    HAD TO LEARN EVERYTHING THE HARD WAY

    BUT IVE BN LIVING THE DARK WAY

    PUT IN A SHADOW THAT NOBODY COULD SEE

    MY LIFES BEEN FUKED

    SO F'U'K EVRYBODY

    WHO THINKS THAT IM CRAZY

    POINT AT ME AND LAUGH

    SEE WHAT IT DOES TO ME



    SUM TIMES I LOOK UP

    AND ANALYSE THE SKY

    AND ASK MYSELF

    WAS I MEANT TO BE HERE

    AND WHY

    WHY I ALWAYS MESS UP

    WHY I CANT LIVE STROGER THEN THEM

    WHY I JUST BREAK DOWN AND CRY

    COZ IM A BURDEN TO MY WORLD

    COZ I AINT GOT A HEART THAT FEELS FOR OTHERS

    U CAN HIT ME WIV UR STORYS

    BUT THEY DON’T MATCH UP

    2 WOT I GOTTA DEAL WIV

    EVERY TIME I WALK IN TO MY HOME

    AND EVEN WEN MAMMAS TEARS DROP

    I DON’T HAVE THE DECENCY TO ASK WHY

    AND TELL HER TO STOP

    SO MY HEARTS BLOKED UP ITS TURNIN BLACK

    I DON’T CARE HOW Bad IT IS

    I JUS LISTEN TO PAC AND SHED SUM TEARS

    IT AINT FEAR.

    WHY TEL ME DAT

    U CANT

    SO IM BUSTIN OUT.

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    not bad poetry, was very deep and honest, i liked it....keep writing

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    Thanx Man Jus Tryna Keep It Real Son.

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    what ya'll think bout this let me know. holla.

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    i think you need to work on your structure. you've got to make full lines in open mic and turn off the CAPS LOCK KEY because it makes the piece hard to read and seems like you're trying to shout. Work on your vocab as well, you need something pretty sophisticated to get recognition on here. The topic was ok, but you're structure ruined it for me.

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