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    Battlefield

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    Time flows rabidly in vanity over a shadow of cursed humanity,
    A smile showed languidly by inanity foretelling the worst insanity,
    A soft whisper in the heart of Christianity to a lost relic of profanity:
    Blasphemy! … Echoing slow over the forsaken planes, portending
    Life’s Arch Enemy to reawaken from its chains, foretelling …….
    A march for The Ending


    Time shows stolidly a battlefield shielded from passing hours,
    Sordidly wielded power shall yield the wrath that shall devour
    Two armies on Death’s path…prays for amnesty say blood bath,
    And there they were, the remains of a once glorious dynasty,
    A hand of pure warriors,honorable,facing the abominable
    For his Majesty…Nefarious demons interminable in number,
    Hope goes asunder instantly,shattered by a thunderous squeal,
    Time stands still


    The two armies charge each other in screams that shudder the lands,
    Bows discharge death’s hand under the bark of devilish commands,
    Beyond the marge of darkness, skies darken with black clouds,
    Clashing like two dragons……..the roar of madness enshrouds
    The paragon of courage,its torch unseen to the newly birth blindness,
    All that remains is a vague knowledge sweeping the scorched earth,
    “Behind us!” ………creeping like a plague,Evil unfolds so devilish,
    Cleft flesh and splattered blood, penetrated shields by hellish spears
    To enmesh what is left of those whom without hatred chattered God,
    A rose has faded into ash in the shadow of the agitated clash,
    Crows above wait to scavenge the remains of hateful revenge,
    To avenge Evil minions come in zillions to face twelve brave men,
    The smell of death raves from the deranged billions to engrave the land,
    Battling hand-to-hand…cut arms leave armless spawns in the carnage,
    Earthlings crawl thru dead corpses with one purpose:….to punish,
    Headless bodies tarnish living, with their cut head still breathing,
    Evil says kill,kill,kill…………………And they’re still killing,
    Thrilling souls with their thundering roars and shattering force,
    Gathering close, they unfold death to its course thru a swinging mace,
    Splattering the brains of the remains of the bleeding human race,
    Men fall on the ground without a sound on endless spawn carcasses,
    Evil pounds their bones to dust with rusted blades that encrust
    In their skin that is unjust for them to live…


    Time starts to unwind thru the smoking shroud of the battlefield,
    Words are blind……..Can not describe such treacherous actions,
    Slanderous signs of what is left of humanity after this insanity,
    After this malefaction,all that is left is the smell of putrefaction…
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    Liked this alot.. topic is nothin new, but you came very good with it, everyline was very describing wich made this a good read.. the emotion kept me interested throughout the whole OM, your vocab was very good, multis were there, everything flowed very well in this, structure was also pretty good.. theres really nothing bad to say about this, everything was on point.. this was a good drop, hope to see more from you..

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    a craaaaaaaaaaaaaazy topic fam. you had some excellent imagery from start to finish, i could really picture the battle in my mind, something really apoclyptic about tha whole thing. your vocab was strong and your rhymes was were solid. just great work.


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    it was pretty good mang keep dropin

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    that was aight it had emotion an great vocab keep doin ya thing pimp an im lookin forward to seein what you put on that diss with me you word perfect an nalege

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    As it has been said it's quite a common topic but you wrote well with it. You write using good vocabulary and a lot of multies adding to the flow. Good imagery helped me picture what was going on and the emotion you wrote with and included made this very interesting.

    I enjoyed the piece... Keep it up... Thanks for the feedback on "Tears of the World"... I appreciate it.

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    thx for the feeds guys.really apreciated...
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    yes this shyt is crakk...the topic iz hott...different...shyt iz crakk tho....tha battlefield..i can picture dat shyt...datz whatz hott about it...good drop tho b...EZ

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    thx......
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    U Dont Wanna Battle Me
    I Wont Take Back One Word So Thats The Way It Has 2 Be
    You Could End Up Dead Just Tryin 2 Prove Shit
    Ill Put Chalk Around Ya Head Like I Do 2 A Pool Stick
    U Wanna Know Da Size Of The Gat Im Holdin
    Its The Kind That'll Have Your Back All Swollen
    Nigga Fuckin Wit ME You'll Get Ya Ass Jumped
    The Only Trigger U Held Was On A Gas Pump
    I'll Put Holes In U Starting At Ya Chest
    I Have 2 Gunz And They Both Cause Cardiac Arrest
    I'll Splatter Ya Body On This Place
    Im Hungry Like A South African Wit Flies Stuck 2 My Face
    I'll Either Choke U Or Shoot U In The Chest
    Or Should I Just Put U 2 Rest
    The Gun I Got Will Make U Do A Back Flip
    When Im Done Ill Have U Losin Ur Breathe Like U Runnin That Track Shit
    HATE IT OR LOVE J REZ ON TOP
    now ur jealous of me when your shit gon stop
    after im done ill have people runnin up to me
    my response will be fuck gucci
    where im from comin out of eastwick
    yo dont run up on me when i carry my heat bitch
    you dont want it wit the general of cky
    fuckin wit me people gonna see you die
    i only respond one time 2 bitches
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    wow just wow... tight shit man... complex words and great imagery, very deep and full of emotion.. keep doing your thing

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    This was a bit up and down in my opinion...

    Some places it was really good, in others you seemed to lose it a bit. That effected everything except the pictures you clearly had in your head. I could tell that you were trying to say what was on your mind but you wasnt finding the right words. Your flow was good in most of it but like I said you seemed to lose it a bit in some parts.

    Overall, good piece, very creative but try and hold it together all the way through next time. You got a lot of potential, just need to practise

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    Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//Aim for tha head/ when u say im gon getem nigga//cass lit they ass just to let them know u aint playin witem
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    yo thats hot nice flow but work more on rhymes and ur lines but still a hot verse i give it a 7.0/10 good job ok keep up tha gd work

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    thx for the hints LM...
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