Hate Race

[psycotic]

so much hate race takes place, i don't no were to begin,
everybody gets judged,for there race,
wat they wear,n most importantly their religion,
it's all wrong n only we can put it right,
if my dreams wud come true, all this hate race, wud stop 2nite,
but my dreams don't come true, its just a fantasy,
the violence is everywhere, welcome to our reality,
one question tho, why hate others, for the colour of their skin?
its a fact,we all no, we're the same within,

this is just da start,pls tell me if its ok so far

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[warchild]

This was a decent piece but it could of been much better.
The topic was obviously something that we all think about and relate to but you only scratched the surface with this short verse i think if you wrote 2 verses about it you could definately have a dope piece on your hands but as it is now its decent but nothing more.
The structure was ok the vocab was and the flow needs work.

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[young duce]

dats ahight i mean its bout average spit dat shit son