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    [ Brit-Hop ] Valentines Verse One

    Started writing this last night in time for today, but it seemed a
    waste to rush the second half just to get it finished. I'll edit the full
    piece probably next week when ive finished it. Consider this as a
    preview if you will:


    It started back when I was seventeen ..

    Id never seen anyone as svelte, sublime ..
    .. or saccharine as her;
    Had to letter know, how I felt inside.
    So I wrote her one,
    Revealing she held my heart - there in her fist
    & how id hoped to run -
    my fingers through her hair as we kissed
    With beauty to provoke the sun ..
    .. I didn't care to resist.
    She fuelled the fire of this fools desire, as I stared at her with -
    An acquired admiration.
    It was now or never ..
    .. sounds stupid, but at the time, somehow the weather ..
    .. seemed to change.
    Seething rain ceased to beat the panes.
    I handed the note over;
    Sank into my seat again ..
    .. Expecting the cold shoulder, but pretty soon we became -
    Livinous nomads,
    Revelling in the ribbon of romance ..
    .. Raising a middle finger to those who'd given us no chance.
    Last edited by Baron Mynd; February 14th, 2005 at 08:44 AM

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    Replied to WarChilds and Da 1 N Onlys pieces.

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    good shit blissett.
    timely topical..

    full of emotion
    u shud have called urself Luther Vandross instead of Blissett, <lol

    nah seriously, cool piece man - post the full version when it's done.

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    OH SHIT, loved the ending..overall a good story and a great piece. Seemed more so poetic though which kinda through off the structure/flow but all in all this was a great piece. Good use of imagery and emotion. I'll keep an eye out for you.
    8/10

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=171017

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    O That Was A Great Tune Luth
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    oh well

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    That was cute b-ron ,

    I love you too.
    L e g e n d a r y
    We're Just Godly.

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    Haha ..

    .. weird of Touch to read anything by me ..

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