Ron(not finished)

[Brother Blue Collar]

just wanna know what people think and RON stands for sumthing it's a metpahor, he's not an actual person in the story




B4 Ron i was no one, yea i flowed sum, to help me grow sum
social wise, toasting guys with what i thought was fire stole sum
bars from underground and mainstream stars to corner scheming hard
pushers, screaming "god bless me with talent" fiending for a mod
style of rhyming, but ron was a child of crime and neligence
meant for sumthing better than this, while i fed this future tense
life, like "i will write the best lyrics will light a spark, will right
the wrongs, no simple dreams, with ample reams i will write
more than i sleep", he repeated to himself b4 every verse,
he rarly cursed in his writtens flowed well in spittens, immersed
with rhythm that bred different styles, i sought to feed off his talent
and my guile went b4 my heart, his styles bent my mind and intent
so i hired him as ghost, he had mouths to feed so he to accepted
plowed the streets, ranged my raps from afrocentrism to the elected
officals, he got 10 percent of every cent i made from songs, his grit

so what do you think

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...30#post2029030
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=167604

[djb]

it is alright it read like a common sense piece i dunno just had his flow in my head. not great but good. extend it a little bit more and see what comes out of it. i am interested in seeing the finished product. oh and by the way thanks for no showing asshole...lol...

[Brother Blue Collar]

it is alright it read like a common sense piece i dunno just had his flow in my head. not great but good. extend it a little bit more and see what comes out of it. i am interested in seeing the finished product. oh and by the way thanks for no showing asshole...lol...

thankz and i did mean to show, dope verse you dropped tho

up any more???