Feelings

[Da Professor]

My mind is going into overdrive,
My whole life has just taken a nosedive,
My wive just left me,
I miss her daily,
Why can't I be the one to conduct,
My life is gone, I musta really fucked up,
It feels like my heart is poundin' through my chest,
Like gettin' shot in the heart without a vest,
It's like a race that I can't win,
It's like I'm stuck in whirlwind,
Fightin' myself day and night,
Why do I put up this fight?
My time is up now,
What do I do now?
My life is comin' to an end,
No more time will I spend,
I fucked it up,
And that's what's up,
I know what's missing cuz my heart is peeling,
And guess bitch I do have feelings!!

Hit me with some feedback!! HOLLA!! ANd can anyone tell me how to add links to my posts cuz I don't want this to close!!

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=165570
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=165497

[Vikkie™]

this was complicated hard to hold grasp of what u aimin twoards try editing this u have the skill juss use it better

[Da Professor]

how's this rap guys...




Now everybody from the 212, put your hands cuz I...
Now everybody from the 714, i am a noobie I ain't never done this before,
I'm rhymin' here, you're rhymin there,
take a step back cuz I know y'all scared,
My rhymes they be fantastic,
When i'm through y'all go ecstatic,
I know y'all out there doubt me,
But you don't know one damn thing 'bout me,
I am white, but 1/4 black,
don't hate me I ain't whack,
The game I spit is sick,
I think up rhymes lickety split,
I know think i'm fake,
but i'm afraid y'all be makin a mistake,
Nothin' left to say,
Hit me with some feedback please,
I got nothin' left peace!!

Hit me back with some funky fresh feedback!!! HOLLA!! ANd i am being serious!!

[GhettoFabolous]

First rap is str8, short and weak rhyme scheme, but its a start. If its true then its got a lot of emotion in it, if it not tru then u got some good actin skills thru words. Try and use em better.

Second rap, u done really gotta turn off da 8 mile video son it aint helpin u nam sayin?

Keep droppin.

Hit da link up in my sig.

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[Da Professor]

Life, It's an Earthquake, makes my body shake,
My mind quake in fear,
The echoes from the within my heart ,
draw ever near,
Things like this make our families corrupted,
Intervals of time, like life interrupted,
Sometimes Life at the beggining leads to a new end,
What you get is not what you intend,
It's a game of chance, it's a game of life,
Start a family, with a few kids and a wife,
Take that away and there's nothing left,
Sometimes the easiest isn't the best,
Play the game until your last breath,
Live your life until your death.

[Novacain]

This is something to build from, you have potential... But drop your stuff in 3 different threads if you want each noticed...

Now, quit freeposting in my thread