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    First Drop..

    lyrical bombs strapped to my chest, c-4 duct taped to my vest/
    bout to exploid two times, knockin niggas out with des mutlies n punchlines/
    45 automatic sittin to da side, jump in da car ima go for a ride/
    gun in my lap.. 2 full clips.. someone bout to get clapped/
    one hand on da steerin wheel, blunt in da otha, bout to get high n blow up some mutha fucka/
    dont play no game, dont fuck around wit lames, gettin respect n puttin niggas to shame/
    we can go toe to toe, flow to flow, just no my verse gone steal the show/
    ill grab da mic n grip it tight, spit like dis the fuckin fight of my life/
    spittin sick n rippin through shit, i stay reppin my 216 click/
    get it right, i have no dick, you can call me that freestyle chick/
    this a liquiid phaze, put cha ass in a toxic daze, smell da purple haze/
    I blaze da blunt, like da track, fuck around n get ya skull cracked/


    lookin for some feedback

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    I thought this had nice flow. Rhyming was good. Try and work on thinking of topics, you'll get more creative as you continue posting.

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    "fi-del"
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    rhyme's are ok, flow is mixed in part's due to stretched line's. you sorta lost your rhyme scheme toward's the end.
    overall 5/10

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