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Thread: I Love You (Dedicated) The Return to the Mic

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    I Love You (Dedicated) The Return to the Mic

    I've been down too long...Mark this as my comeback....and look forward to my drops in Sacred Scriptures....and yes....this is IceMan187
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    Erase the past, the present holds whats best
    Resting ya head on my chest
    Holding hands, never another stress
    No one to impress...just us
    To grow old together, through ups and downs
    Smiles and frowns....any weather
    The bad times not evident, it only gets better
    It's a struggle...but its obvious i love you
    All my tears and fears disappear when i hug you
    From life to death, i want you by my side
    Continue to show me wut it's like to be alive
    So lets try...to carry on with a relationship
    You've got my heart, and im sick of you breakin it
    I love you, you love me, what more do we need
    I'm me, your you, thats how i know we'll succeed
    Someday, you'll understand, what its like to be a man
    And have to sit here all alone, no one to hold your hand
    I can't stand...to not see you, even just for a day, i miss you
    Can't wait for dismissal, figuring i might have missed you
    Waiting in hope...waiting for you to greet me with a note
    A lump in my throat...nervous, cus I'm already late for class, and still no sign of your ass
    Sitting around, waiting for the time to pass...
    Run through my door, pick up the phone, and pray that your home
    Can't you see? I would put my life on the line, just for you to survive
    Wipe the tears from your eyes, if you started to cry
    The reason is clear, crystal, I'm myself when im with you
    I want to make you my wife and spend the rest of my life with you

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    now, i understand the structure isnt best....but it flows perfectly when i say it....you just have to be a certain style to get it.....my style....so please, just try not to critique so much on that.....and more-so wut you think overall.....im not looking to be nominated for OM of the month or Legends or wutever....but i wrote this under 15 minutes, with the woman i love in mind....and i havent written a song or poem for at least a couple months

    Thanks for your support, the Great RB.....its been a while......but im back!

    Cliche` Killers representa` (i hope)....lol

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    wow........you guys are fucking sluts

    thanks for reminding me why i never post here

    i got more replies on fucking RV......this shit is ridicilous guys.......seriously

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    Fuck this is deep, im glad your back... this is Suspect btw, incase you missed what happened, i got banned for something i didnt do.

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    im no slut..........i liked it.... seemed like you had some nice emotion in there. i liked how you kept it simple so that the emotions could come through better. it did seem like parts of the rhyme fell off a bit, but if you say it doesn't when you do it that is all that matters. everyone has there own style. i wish you could have extended this a bit. it was a good read and i hope to see more of this kind of stuff from you.

    please return the favor and drop feed on my open mic
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    oh, wutup Suspect.......and Creds........my bad, its been so long since ive been here.....imma hit this cats link up ^^ and someone elses

    thanks for reminding me, and tahnks for the feed DJB

    Uppin......

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    AWW so good definately fo' under 15 minz 'nahmean? itz dope dont worry

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    leave some damn feedback, cocksuckers, stop sleeping
    this is why i left in the first place

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    ^ Sometimes i get more feedback from invisionfree sites with a hell of a lot less members.

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    this was a good piece. it was deep. good flow structure and rhymes.

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    wow.......you guys officially give the WORST feedback

    Rapverse feedback > RB Feedback

    you guys are lucky you have talent!

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    uppin yo!!!!!!

    coming soon:

    Election Protection (Vote or Die 2005)
    ^ a bit late......i wrote it in november sumthin.....a few days before the election
    its on looseleaf.......so im gonna type it up soon

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    Quote Originally Posted by Synistar
    wow........you guys are fucking sluts

    thanks for reminding me why i never post here

    i got more replies on fucking RV......this shit is ridicilous guys.......seriously

    lol also to fucking small hurt my damn eyes

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    upping

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