close encounter... leave feed back plz

[Evil_Joey]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=157749
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=157758


Im extra special... sending intellectual text messages to dyslexic extra terrestrials .. feelin sexual there dissectin sections of my testicles for there collection ..and molestin me with a vast selection of vegitibles. My only question is why they dressed me like a pinyata and left me in the middle of a mexican festivle?????

Now you prolly think joeys a disturbed person ...
see joey runnin around the mall naked obsurd cursin...
joeys got u wonderin why he talks about him self 3rd person!

but ever since the abduction, my rhymes lay destruction.
lil green men from mars couldnt stop the scars of my bars.
they could have lazers and light saber to fight with
and still not match the razzors i write with..
just look at the cows i leave mutilated as i type this.
Its just cattle no need to mourn those..
u should be more concerned about my rhymes leavin crop circles in ur corn rows...
Theres no tellin the devistation im sendin back when my pen attacks..
there was more to this verse but i forgot it, when i was flashed by those men in black.

[Princess]

wow that was hella tight .. awsome vocab structure ect and nice multis reminded me of eminems early stuff like infinite good topic as well

[Omniscient]

Yeah just like what princess said i thought it had good vocab and structure
u look like da next eminem to me dogg....keep it up bro ya bringin sumthin new to this furom....aight

[Evil_Joey]

True... thx for the feed back Still uppin for more!!!!!!

[Interpersonal]

Salam...i liked this piece even though it was kinda short...i enjoyed the multies and it flowed pretty well...the structure was nice too...overall hot shit like curry excrement...one

[Willy B]

nice nice good vocab... i dont see why you would want feed back though its good. but its to short... make the next one longer. stay up one

[Evil_Joey]

nice nice good vocab... i dont see why you would want feed back though its good. but its to short... make the next one longer. stay up one

i see people tend not to read them if there too long.. since im new here i wanted to keep it short so people would read it.. even if its short i think it was worth feed back.



thx for feed back so far.. still uppin! 1

[The Ruckus]

Good shit, bro. Great multis, good content, good structure, great wordplay. Very nice drop. Still need some length though, but at least you're consistent!!

[Born To Kill]

This is kinda stupid...

Stupid concept, stupid self-prop...

But you managed to pull it together and make it fairly enjoyable.

Still not sure how you pulled that off.

Prolly the dope vocab (Which you DID overdue in the beginning! Don't think you didn't!)

And that "crop circles in corn rows" line was pretty tight.

All in all, eh...

But not a bad eh.

Peace

[Laureate]

amusing...nice multis and ineternals....random ass rhyme scheme...
sounds like sumthin Canibus would spit....yeah...nothin spectacular
but it was interesting

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