A kritikal tale......

[Ack Scent]

once upon a time there lay a hot flowist,
Been spittin 4 a while but nobody really noticed,
until one day, somebody tried ta sign him,
hooked himup wit a sig and put a crew behind him,
Decked out wit lines and made him co-owner,
And so he accepted cuz he was tired of rollin loner,
He kept up his end in brought in hot recruits,
Even if they werent hot they had potential ta get loose,
And who ever jnew it would turn out like this,
The names cahnged ta kritikal cuz psykoasis wasn't tight shit,
It started wit mr.spit and spread on ta Def,
ReNeGaDe was 1st up and Voetsek was nex(t),
then we got pred and ..:torch:.. and oreo aftar,
Yung Face, chitown riddla and DuvalRapStar,
Shadow was last now we got a killa squad,
NEED I SAY MORE......except OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!

[Mixtape]

alright flow, great structure, nice vocab, everything was there that is needed for a great rhyme, it was hot, i liked your other rhyme My Pledge to well later when i drop another return the favor peace out

[Cinquix Incision]

nice structure ahd a good flow to it, had nice vocab. and so on,.............thought well on it good job

[Ack Scent]

Thanks fo da feedback peeps, much appeciation and ill drop feedback when y'all drop anotha post.

[Boy Nova]

This was a quality piece well structured and written, it was very easy to read and flowed great. Another verse wouldnt go a miss.

Peace

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Fel#ny]

love this piece def... flowed well and had some good content... too short though needs more to it. keep reppin boy
PEACE

[Ack Scent]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...85#post1866085
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...71#post1866071

There u go my bad....i just keep 4gettin.

[Chitown Riddla]

A ha much love to the Kritikal Fam tight piece Def as always .

[Cinquix Incision]

ya it was iight flow, the structure was ok and the vocab. was diff. but nice.....nice wurk, liked most of it............

[Cinquix Incision]

ya it was iight flow, the structure was ok and the vocab. was diff. but nice.....nice wurk, liked most of it............
just thought i would leave my real thoughts and i'll put more constructive critism on it but i liked pretty much all of it... had a nice everything i said before

[Cinquix Incision]

ya it was iight flow, the structure was ok and the vocab. was diff. but nice.....nice wurk, liked most of it............
just thought i would leave my real thoughts and i'll put more constructive critism on it but i liked pretty much all of it... had a nice everything i said before..............

sorry about that credz the button got stuck on my computor, srry about the freepost it was an accident

[noncentz]

again i see potential nonstop through this peace but you never delivered it built up but never came....not bad all and all

[The Godfather]

it was a sick rhyme. it had pretty good flow, structure, and rhythm. I liked alotta the vocab you used.
I liked the intro:

once upon a time there lay a hot flowist,
Been spittin 4 a while but nobody really noticed

i liked the flow and rhythm throughout these sentences:

Decked out wit lines and made him co-owner,
And so he accepted cuz he was tired of rollin loner,
He kept up his end in brought in hot recruits,
Even if they werent hot they had potential ta get loose,
And who ever jnew it would turn out like this,
The names cahnged ta kritikal cuz psykoasis wasn't tight shit....

...then the rhyme weakened in flow just a bit after that..but came back with a strong ending: Shadow was last now we got a killa squad,
NEED I SAY MORE......except OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!
I liked that part. Overall i give it 9/10, nice rhyme, keep it up

[Shadowsk8er]

i liked it man it was really good flow and i especially liked it cuz man it had my name in it and nobody was dissin it lol............nice...