Dragon I vs. Pied Piper

[Haywood Jewblomi]

The rules are as follows:

No dr, no crew votes (not that either of us are in a crew or have any fans), and post an hour or less after checking in.

Ten lines minimum.

This will count as me checking in.

[Jay Mel]

Im about to teach this bitch a lesson/Nigga i aint usher aint bout to be confessin'/Nigga talk shit, ya wont get ya blessin./ Aint nothin to be testin, havin old nigga's commitin suicide/ This aint no lie/Nigga, i always represent tha chi/I'm gonna say tha truth/ Hittin' Home runs like my nigga "Babe Ruth"./I'm bout to make this boy go P00F/Nigga, youz a D00F/I got a ring that cost $100,00 and i got proof.


Aight this aint my best but its somethin off my head.


Come on peeps, please vote

[Jay Mel]

Uppin, come on lets get votes~!!!!!!!!!

VOTE OR DIE!!!!!

[Haywood Jewblomi]

lol. They can't vote until i've posted my verse.

Realise now that I never paid the piper,
In the same way that JFK never dodged the sniper,
It's a verbal hail of bullets from up on the grassy knoll,
That'll leave you further from office than senator bob dole,
I predict a vast majority of votes for me,
Whearas you have less chance than kerry winning tennesse,
Not even a film from micheal moore could achieve you victory,
Because success for a loser is purely contradictory,
Hip Hop voting for you is extremely hypocritical,
So if you do win I'll just have to claim it's all political.

The way to get people to vote in this is to vote on their battle, then leave a link to yours.

[Haywood Jewblomi]

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[E s c]

vote: dragon
why:he had the best punches ...some made me laugh..some personals..needa work on them a bit tho you worded it ok and your flow was aight same with structure..

other guy:you worded and structured yours horibly you didnt have personals...
and your punches relly wernt great..

Vote:dragon

well done..
no hate

[Mr. Key]

Im about to teach this bitch a lesson/Nigga i aint usher aint bout to be confessin'/Nigga talk shit, ya wont get ya blessin./ Aint nothin to be testin, havin old nigga's commitin suicide/ This aint no lie/Nigga, i always represent tha chi/I'm gonna say tha truth/ Hittin' Home runs like my nigga "Babe Ruth"./I'm bout to make this boy go P00F/Nigga, youz a D00F/I got a ring that cost $100,00 and i got proof.

-Um this shit was all to basic, u gotta throw punches, and have multies metas and personals, u werent even really attackin ur opponet, and u had to much selfglorification.... who cares that u have proof of a $100,000 dollar ring? As u put it $100,00, but that shit doesnt matter in a battle, and buyin a ring for that much is dumb anyway on a side note.

Realise now that I never paid the piper,
In the same way that JFK never dodged the sniper,
--decent start
It's a verbal hail of bullets from up on the grassy knoll,
That'll leave you further from office than senator bob dole,
-ok
I predict a vast majority of votes for me,
Whearas you have less chance than kerry winning tennesse,
ha, pretty good
Not even a film from micheal moore could achieve you victory,
Because success for a loser is purely contradictory,
filler, but got the point acroos
Hip Hop voting for you is extremely hypocritical,
So if you do win I'll just have to claim it's all political.
-filler, decent closer

Well considerin u didnt need much to win i cant bash ur verse! lol, nice vocab though, but this wasnt really a challenge.
Vote: Dragon, for better punches, vocab, and a less basic verse. 1

[Haywood Jewblomi]

Thanks for the voting people! Upping 2! Upping 2! Upping 2! Upping 2!

[נєм]

Ok Vote Dragon I.
Better punches and structure.
Well actualy he won everything.
Pied Piper wat the fuck man structure was wack.
Punches good in 1988-1997 man.
Good verse Dragon I, not a bad come back battle man.

Pz.

[Jay Mel]

uppin, i will vote for whoever if they vote for me :-D

[Haywood Jewblomi]

^^^^^ Surely saying that is against the rules? Anyways, Uppin 3.

[lowlife]

well
flo-dragon i
wordplay-dragon i
punchs-dragon i
personals-none really
winner=dragon i but dragon u got bit caried away on the political stuff

[Haywood Jewblomi]

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[Haywood Jewblomi]

This is my final up. Hopefully some people will vote on this....

[Reynolds]

Pied Piper

Im about to teach this bitch a lesson/
Nigga i aint usher aint bout to be confessin'/
^ blah at the opener weak punch...no diss at all

Nigga talk shit, ya wont get ya blessin./
^ 3rd line rhyme isn't good no decent punch

Aint nothin to be testin, havin old nigga's commitin suicide/
This aint no lie/
^ Blah weak

Nigga, i always represent tha chi/
^ Pointless line doesn't connect with anything

I'm gonna say tha truth/
Hittin' Home runs like my nigga "Babe Ruth"./
^ Wheres the diss??? no punch again

I'm bout to make this boy go P00F/
Nigga, youz a D00F/
^ Blah

I got a ring that cost $100,00 and i got proof.
^ again no connection

Overall
WTF was this???...i'm sorry PP but this verse had nothing your structure was screwed...how i made it out should be the way you lay out your verse...lose the / it's not needed...also you need punches personals wordplay vocab metas multies to lot serious elevation is needed if you are to make it here that verse at best i'm sorry to say was terrible

Dragon I

Realise now that I never paid the piper,
In the same way that JFK never dodged the sniper,
^ aight opener but punch coulda been better

It's a verbal hail of bullets from up on the grassy knoll,
That'll leave you further from office than senator bob dole,
^ no real diss weak punch

I predict a vast majority of votes for me,
Whearas you have less chance than kerry winning tennesse,
^ 1st line self-glory but 2nd line aight punch

Not even a film from micheal moore could achieve you victory,
Because success for a loser is purely contradictory,
^ aight punch again

Hip Hop voting for you is extremely hypocritical,
So if you do win I'll just have to claim it's all political.
^ no diss no real hard hitting punch

Overall
A better verse structure and flow on point a couple of punches but not a strong verse you won this but this was more of a topical verse you were mad political and you went off point because of it...you need more focus and try to add more punches and personals in future but you seem aight jus keep at it

V/Dragon I