10-15 Lines
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Verse due Tuesday Midnight (10/12)
10-15 Lines
House Rules
Verse due Tuesday Midnight (10/12)
Here goes another battle, better put 'em in these shackles
He plays with his rattle, but he's dealing with a jackal
Look at raven, the only guy whos shaven his legs
Earths my haven, right now I got a craven for eggs (Raven = Bird = Egg! =P)
It's been confirmed that birds eat dirty worms..
with all them germs, your better off with sperm
In the rap game, I'm the professor, and your just a lesser
You rhymes are lame, worse then an inanimate object like a dressor
You gotta admit, I'm too legit, for me to waste time to spit
I'm the shit, I'll commit verbal acts to make you quit
Take away three from three and you will see what your rhyme skills be
This is my key, to make you flee, I'll haunt your family like a banshee
I Won, so make sure you close your mouth around the winner
Your done, time for you to go fly south for the winter
Took me a while to type, wasn't able to think good =(... Writers Block?
Wow man this guy really thinks hes the shit,
I will hit you with rymes so hard,
It'l make you suck your mothers tit,
To figure this dudes daily life aint much of a mystery,
So sit back punk and let me make you history,
You go to school thinking your real cool,
but what you dont know is that even the ugly girl thinks your the fool,
I can see why your name is gamesta, sitting all alone on the video game,
wishing you had fame from the shity ryme you just made,
Picking on your little bro so you think you can fight,
But how do you supose your tuff when you cant even spit right,
if you really think your great from the rym you spent an hour making,
then..damn man your better off staying at your mom's masterbateing,
raven took it by far nice spit man gamsta u just said shit that ryhmes raven u had a great flow and punches gamsta u need to elevate alot! but keep it up it will hapen
v raven
Gamesta wins
Punches - Both
Rhymes - Gamesta
Multis - Gamesta
Meta - Gamesta
Flow - Gamesta
Structure - Gamesta
Personal - Gamesta
Some of Raven's stuff didn't rhyme, and his flow was horrible, look at this
"You go to school thinking your real cool, - 9 syllables
but what you dont know is that even the ugly girl thinks your the fool" - 17 Syllable
"I will hit you with rymes so hard" didn't rhyem with anything
"if you really think your great from the rym you spent an hour making,
then..damn man your better off staying at your mom's masterbateing," Bad rhyme
V/ Gamesta
Uppin ......................................... # 1
Uppin............................................. ......... Fo'Shizzle!
Eh Gamesta You um really tryed hard to make that raven line come off.. i see where your goign but it doesnt make since and there areonly two words that help you out.. and there the words your using you feel me?
[b]Take away three from three and you will see what your rhyme skills be
This is my key, to make you flee, I'll haunt your family like a banshee
the set up was your best line so ill quote the bar.
You have an alright rhyme scheme, but lack punchs with any real strength you stir off topics far to much to have any real clarity, and you lack metaphors and have weak similies frankly ( but i can see those getting beter)
Raven
Alright first off.... Rhyme has an H motha fucker spell it right.. 2nd, your punchs lack strength but are consistant. You could really use some hard topics to punch on, you could try working on personals, and frankly a more origanal rhyme scheme would REALLY help you..
if you really think your great from the rym you spent an hour making,
then..damn man your better off staying at your mom's masterbateing,
vote raven-
just came off with more consistant punchs, much weaker rhyme scheme though BUT made up for it with better metaphors etc.
I Am The Thought That Breeds Life
Pretty poor battle but Gamesta easily took this cos he had some good punches and allright nameplay. Raven was just wack and most was glorification. Decent structure by both but gamesta should shorten your lines and take the bold off, dont need it to see the rhymes, and concentrate on better punches instead of multis. Multies are good but punches are more important. And gamesta was that you trying to vote for yourself up there? You got the same IP as PrankCranker and hes only posted here, makes me suspicous but you were better here anyway.
V/Gamesta
yo you guys both got alright flows
both you need to do better though
but gamesta gotta give this one to you homie
u stayed on top your rhymes were ill
you stayed consitent made the flow go
Vote:Gamesta
yo return the favor
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ok well atought gamesta had a nice flow a lil strucure work needed up ur vocab it was a lil shabby but that thing with eggs was fuuny good punches good shit bro
raven ur structue needs improvement its hard to read any one can put rhyeing words together and calll themself a rapper but ya gotta rhyme ya shit ur vocab wasent all graet eather yur a lil weaker like i sed work on structure and flow
Vote /Gamesta bro vote on my battles and do the pole thing
syllables got notin 2 do wit it, listen 2 shyt like Twista, depending on how fast u read da line u can make it work,Originally Posted by PrankCranker
Raven- ur shyt wuz really basic n simple there were punches but they didnt hit hard at all, structure wuz all fuked up but it had a pretty nice flo
Gamesta-wtf, u just put 2gether rhymin words, everything wuz either played(masturbatin lines)or just fillers, personals were there but they sucked ass, da multies were at da most like 2 syllables so they dont really even count
vote-Raven, for actually havin punches
I was here before RB died
- Micnificant
- MakeveliTrained
GrindHouse > BIYATCCHHHH
Return da favor, vote on 1 of da battles in my sig
I was here before RB died
- Micnificant
- MakeveliTrained
GrindHouse > BIYATCCHHHH
Wait mag, what did you mean by
\Gamesta-wtf, u just put 2gether rhymin words, everything wuz either played(masturbatin lines)or just fillers
Raven said the thing about masturbatin=P
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