With No One

[J-Beast]

**Hey. . I'm pretty new here, and just wanted opinions on some of my writing. So ya know, I am a female, yea my sn could could either way. Anyway, thanks for taking the time. - J~Bea§t -

With No One

My worst fear is being alone,
With no one to hold close or console-
me when I feel like giving up,
Cause it's all too much to handle at once,
Untold are smothered feelings I hold inside,
In the dark I hide, with no shoulder to cry-
on; Thoughts spawn confusion, piled upon mixed emotions,
What can I make of these wild notions?
I have no one with which to share love, except God above,
But even his pressence is not enough,
It's touch I need, warmth to feed my soul; now hollow and cold,
So deep it's grown into the unknown, as I dwell there alone-
tears swell; I know well this fear I depict,
So real are the wounds it inflicts, that will never heal,
And I feel I've lost all hope, with this pain I'll never cope. . .
If I'm ever alone, and you happen to see-
me weak with tear stained cheeks, I plead;
Sit beside me for a while, until a smile I convey,
I'll then understand if your unable to stay,
Yet here I'll remain; the comfort I felt will slowly fade,
But I pray, your company onto me bestow tonight; for that is all I crave,
With that love you show to me, I swear, my life you will have saved.

[Nique.]

This was nice. You're a good writer. Should of made it longer.

My worst fear is being alone,
With no one to hold close or console-
me when I feel like giving up,
Cause it's all too much to handle at once,
Untold are smothered feelings I hold inside,
In the dark I hide, with no shoulder to cry-
on; Thoughts spawn confusion, piled upon mixed emotions,
What can I make of these wild notions?
I have no one with which to share love, except God above,
But even his pressence is not enough,

This was nice. Keep writing.

[jimbean]

yeah shorty you got some flavor, it seems the beauty comes out of your beast...
you know poetic flow over some type of tragedy...

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[noncentz]

this is divine comedy as far as poetic concept and it is a great display of talkent i give this thumbs up all the way

[Incineratedrose]

yeah shes awesome

[Daz]

This was nice. You're a good writer. Should of made it longer.

My worst fear is being alone,
With no one to hold close or console-
me when I feel like giving up,
Cause it's all too much to handle at once,
Untold are smothered feelings I hold inside,
In the dark I hide, with no shoulder to cry-
on; Thoughts spawn confusion, piled upon mixed emotions,
What can I make of these wild notions?
I have no one with which to share love, except God above,
But even his pressence is not enough,

This was nice. Keep writing.

Yeah thats what i was thinking.
this nice. short. but nice. U have potential