Miss Behaving vs. Still_Remain

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Check ins due Monday
Verses due Wednesday

[Miss Behaving]

Checking In...

When will the topic be posted? Im a busy lady so the sooner the better...

[Incineratedrose]

^yeah seriously... its due wednesday and we dont even know the topic? WTF?

[Whyte Ave.]

hey..I'll vote up this topical for sure when both you drop
but could you please hit up my Topical against Tha Joka..its being slept on madly
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=146349
thanks alot

[God.]

Topic: Ur feelings when a loved one is cheating (partner or family member)

[Incineratedrose]

“Tears”
By: Still_Remain

How many days in this year,
Have you woke only to find tears?
All over your pillow, emotions unfurl,
You know she’s with another man, your girl,
Is cheating, and your love is depleting,
You gotta sit her down and have a meeting,
Before you get deeper and deeper in this relationship,
So when she comes home, and she goes for the lips,
Get a grip; those lips were on someone else’s dick,
Along with that is your tongue that’s getting the same lick,
From the same mouth, how could she stoop so low?
A sharp blow, this girl just knocked you flat like a plateau,
What to do and where to go are the few questions on your mind,
Will you make it? Will you be fine? I guess all that will tell is time,
can’t believe she used to be mine,fighting the tears as u begin to pace,
But it doesn’t help; they begin to flow anyway streaming down my face,
You feel weak, and scared, but who cares? From the tears…
Your vision’s impaired, you begin to dry it up, but then it appears,
Her car, she pulls in the driveway, try to gather words and what to say,
And you know a good argument is what you need to portray and display,
She steps out and gets her purse; this situation couldn’t be any worse,
you have to converse with this woman, curse words you might disperse,
its God’s fault to hit you with this curse, you look up, she gains on the door,
on your knees your face lays on the floor; try not to scream at this whore
still trembling and you are drowning in shock, shes home, its 11 o’ clock,
You try to squint your eyes as you look up, as it starts to jiggle… the lock…

[Miss Behaving]

Im sorry I didnt post this yesterday, my broadband connection has been down since Monday.






Dear John
"Dear" isnt THAT ironic?
to call you dear after what you've done is a formality- sardonic.
I decided to write you this letter to express myself more clearly
as I know if I were to see you again id express myself too sincerely.
Its hard to finally admit you could have done the things ive heard
but seeing how you've turned on me its hard to take your word
that you have never strayed from me when I found lipstick on your flies
and a love bite on your neck you tried to disguise with blush and lies.

I wish things had been different, I just can't understand
why if you'd ever loved me you could throw out all we'd planned.
This is why I have to end it, for I cant bear to be hurt again
you've already brought my misery and endless amounts of pain.
It fills me with regret that I trusted you with my heart
when inside I knew the truth; you were cheating from the start.
The sad part is I dont hate you for what you've done,
but I can't forgive you for hurting me now I know when it begun.

I suppose ill end this here, as I know you don't care how i've felt
your too pathetic and cruel for that but you'll get back all you've delt.
Lets just hope your whore sticks around long enough to see you turn
and leaves you like the dog you are and then maybe you'll learn.

Elizabeth

[Rook-Killa]

my bad dawgs i cant vote yet on da polls so makes no sense leavin a detailed vote

[God.]

So why the fuck would you post?

[Incineratedrose]

lol i know seriously.. just leave... WERD UP TO MY GOD BRETHEREN

[killa32]

damn still remain u just toke that fool that was the best rap i have seen this week 4 real vote still remain

[killa32]

"wow i thought Still_Remain took this one because his story like was just a lot more effective and i could really flow to his, i just wow, i couldnt draw my eyes from the screen it was so good, good job to the both of you but i think Still_Remain took this one due to his good vocabulary, flow, and also i liked his story and how it was a cliffhanger at the end..."

[datzecho]

excellent topical. Both writers showed a deep emotion, and strong verse.

I felt that miss b had a more creative verse, and liked how she expressed it in a letter format.
but still had a more impactful verse, and left you in suspense in the end, I hope we see a cont. of that verse one day.

so, this makes the vote a hard one.

still had major word play that created a superior flow.


vote=still,

[STAT$]

Both verses were koo........Miss was more complex and had more originality but Still had a verse that made me want to read more. I was feelin Still a little more cuz it drew me in and kept me more interested. So my vote goes to Still for a better overall verse.

V/Still Remain

[StraighAce]

both were good verses

ms.- had some complexity....thats abou it
still - had me drawn in and was connecting to me on a better level
his verse had a better impact and made be want to keep reading
still's verse was just better

v/still remain