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Last edited by Neruda II; January 17th, 2005 at 03:47 PM
murder murder
ur in bounce's crew aren't you...anyway..this was good...very good line structure, very elevated, a few flaws in the flow, minor though...this piece was very good, i felt the concept, i liked the way it was done....
9.6/10
Bittersweet
Nope, not in bounces crew. I'm staying in Po'Ethics 'till the end. I know what you mean about the flow. I did this pretty quick. It was heartfelt to me. Thanks for the feed.
murder murder
Uppity up.
murder murder
Nice shit, man...
Good message.
It isn't a new one to me, but you used real examples to get your point across and I think that helped strengthen your message.
Good length, not much filler, if any.
Strong vocab, except, you went a bit simplistic for your rhymes...but overall you blended simple and complex well.
Good stuff, Maynard!
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