A Man Apart

[Sublime D]

Im empty inside
Only space where my soul used to reside
Im trying to revive, the zest I had for life
But many troubles and strife… have extended the night
To blanket my days… with an unholy haze
Of quandary and confusion… a disillusioning malaise
No more dreams of better days
Just a struggle, to the grave
I don’t know what im doing, no passion for pursuing
Simply repetitive actions… going through the motions
Constant days of relaxing… flowing with the ocean
The current of life…no questions… No opposition

I stare in the dark every night till I pass out
Nothing on my mind…just structuring rhymes
Devising a rhythm to life… so I can end it
Don’t give a fuck who I’ve hurt or offended
My beliefs and complacencies have been upended recently
I feel disease has afflicted my delicate spiritual ease
Im losing focus, path, light, love and direction
Spending my time trying to keep an erection
Empty pleasures…the measures of a man who’s lost faith
In life, himself and the human race
A blemish on the earth’s face
A disgrace to his kin, a mistake
But despite all my sins, I can easily be erased

by david alexander bryant jr


I replied to Twyzted's beautiful poem

[Foreshadow]

This was pretty good. I liked how you described being alone and not caring that much. The emotion was nice.

[DthsMissingAngel]

I loved this. It's nice to read your work again. You had an amazing amount of imagery and imagery. The flow was great and in some ways I can relate to it. Especially staring in the dark until you pass out. I especially loved the ending. Fav part:

A blemish on the earth’s face
A disgrace to his kin, a mistake
But despite all my sins, I can easily be erased

Scheme and vocab were good. Overall, I loved it, keep up hun.

[bornspokenword]

I saw that movie...liked it

"But many troubles and strife… have extended the night
To blanket my days… with an unholy haze
Of quandary and confusion… a disillusioning malaise"

that just rolls off the tongue...

nice Paine quote, by the way...what does that asshole know about utopia?
more than me...

so it sounds like you find solice in your writing, awsome.
I kinda related to this on another level...your first half reminded me of the
"close to a year" writer's block I had...I felt incomplete...
then one day, like an epiphany, there it was

good stee...

[Sublime D]

what the fuck are you talking about?....seriously...your post confused me....this poem sucks anyway

[Chemarim]

weird brake down in charateristics, good concept but the words you chose wern't that strong, but over all in all it was good . keep it up an improve.

[Sublime D]

why do people keep peepin this one..read sinful symmetry, this one sucks

[Bloom.Quist]

Ok then fine i wont read it.

[bornspokenword]

you seem to confuse easily...but I'll read your other one

[Bloom.Quist]

Need to leave a link to a piece you responded to. Thanks