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    *good read guaranteed* *rates appreciated*

    Im persistent clawin thru this existence
    As we’re weathered an worn we develop resistance
    We build inside growin as we livin life
    Thoughts crystalisin on perception crystalline
    But knowledge flows forth if so sought
    Glows…then ‘molten flows’ form ‘rock’ lines
    Ravaged but savage…hot rhymes is habit
    Rap addict…smoking MCs on hot knives
    I lock eyes wit the devil an not minds
    Evils tangible…once sparked inflammable
    One part of two each is part of each animal
    I beat the beast an reach manageable peaks
    Handle the heat like holdin a candle that’s leaked
    From all angles the least damage is reaped
    An most benefit gained when ur manner is peaceful
    Whether bitterly cynical or a man of the people
    Evil greets u wit a smile like a pedophile
    All these ‘animals’ here are makin me ‘go wild’
    See smoke rise from my words if my egos riled
    An evil child feet agile with lethal guile
    Enlightening unleashing the writings inside
    Residing in nightmares released in a tide
    While the rest of u ‘MCs’ spit tired dry flips
    My mind drips constantly wit cyanide scriptz
    Til I’m tired an quit tryin an Im probably sik dyin
    My sik mind’ll be quick firin these slick lines
    While I sit an levitate on metaphors an meditate
    U still spit played rhymes bout guns an sellin weight
    Elevate above mundane regular fixtures
    Spark an endorphin release in ur molecular mixture
    I impress wit the text scriptures S on my chest shit
    On ur best not to test list cos I flex wit the best wit
    Last edited by intermentals; June 10th, 2004 at 09:47 AM

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    Good read,some complex vocab and rhymes,good simple multies,flowed well,no real topic,some good punches etc,sorta same style as me on some of my undergreound tracks,good read but get rid of the ~ ~ if peeps can't spot the rhymers and wordplay thats there problem.And try and be more specific with topic.

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    Last edited by west; June 10th, 2004 at 09:09 AM

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    a little rambling... which is ok... for just a blazin track verse...

    i hate the little ~~ things... i think it just clogs up the lines... but it wasn't too bad...

    keep working.... i'd like to see how you could transfer this talent with multis and wordplay into a more meaningful and purposeful topic
    Hence Forward

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    Thanx Im gonna drop anotha piece soon called Fear = Control...should be deep so peep that...

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    Uppin...

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    that was a pretty good drop,you used really good vocabulary in it.keep writing

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    uppin

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    Yeah I liked this man. Good job, some nice wordplay up there, and i was feeling the flow mostly.

    "Til I’m tired an quit tryin an Im probably sik dyin
    My sik mind’ll be quick firin these slick lines
    While I sit an levitate on metaphors an meditate
    U still spit played rhymes bout guns an sellin weight"
    ^^real nice

    Very good read. Peace

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    Thanx uppin

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    Nw, hey sorry man, Jus wonderin if uve got the time, can u pls leave feedback on my piece? its old, but jus trying for some more.

    The Artist - Suicide
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=127335

    Aiite, thnx mate... Uppin

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    eh, I didnt feel like this was great.
    not by some of rb's standards.
    it seemd like you was just spitting randomly, all over the place.
    it prolly would've sounded much better if audio.
    okay drop.

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    thanx uppin...btw I write all my drops for audio...

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    I didnt feel it i mean it was ok but i didnt like it

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