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    Sh!t off my Chest

    Sh!t Off My Chest
    born into poverty, the product of a split-home/
    when i can't take it anymore, i blow kill and sip zones/
    cuz they take me to a place, where i ain't gotta worry/
    about makin endz meet, or if i'll die too early/
    been knocked down so many times, but still on my own stand/
    i'm 17 years old, with tha heart of a grown man/
    seen so much pain in my life, don't even know where to start/
    when my baby brother passed, they took a peace of my heart/
    today's my lil' sisters birthday, i'd give tha world not to miss it/
    but i won't see her today, i haven't seen her since Christmas/
    or my lil' brother either, tha pain's so hard to fight/
    every time they get to see me, they hold me so tight/
    wish i could turn back time, tha stupid choices i've made/
    if tha sun is happiness, i can't seem to get out tha shade/
    & that's jus family problems, there's still money & stress/
    i try to find a bright side and not give up jus yet/
    sometimes i wish tha pain will end, then realize, i'm still young though/
    sit up at night jus thinkin, and listenin to Yung Ro/
    i feel what he says, cuz i feel like Nobody too/
    music's my only release, from tha sh!t i go through/
    sometimes i wonder if i'm tha only one who feels pain like this/
    cuz i see people every day who's lives seem so pain-less/
    so every night i pray to God that i see another day/
    and ask Him to guide me right so i don't always live this way/
    this jus somethin i wrote to let ya'll know how i feel/
    and that i ain't all throwbacks and money, cuz my life is for real/
    & if u don't feel this blow a d!ck, i ain't here to prove i'm tha best/
    i was jus layin' up last night and had some sh!t on my chest.


    p.s.-Happy Birthday Mercedes
    "if it makes dollars, it makes sense"

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    I felt the emotion man. a decent drop, with great imagery..
    Props..
    "been knocked down so many times, but still on my own stand/
    i'm 17 years old, with tha heart of a grown man/"
    ^^nice line

    "wish i could turn back time, tha stupid choices i've made/
    if tha sun is happiness, i can't seem to get out tha shade/"
    ^^ good job altogether.
    Keep droppin, and return the favour if u can:

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    billz make sure you drop link to a thread that you dropped feedback on
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    You need to leave a link to a open mic that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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    "if it makes dollars, it makes sense"

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    I liked this actually, its not as bad as most of ther crap clogging this forum. It had a simple flow, easy to follow, read well, multi's were there, emotion was expressed nicely, a little short i felt - but it wasnt bad.

    Keep repping kid.

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    nice reply nice flow pretty deep some emotion in their coulda used a couple of more metas and simile other than that it was pretty good
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