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Thread: A Lesson In Profoundness (and non-rhyming)

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    A Lesson In Profoundness (and non-rhyming)

    trying to be profound is like perpetual motion
    it goes around in circles until you realise
    it doesn't exist, and the buck stops where
    the hungry children don't have the cure...so we ignore the disease
    we ignore what they plead, in a business-like manner
    they climb the forbidden tree in my Garden Of Eden
    I'm feedin myself to sharks for a televisions deal
    where is the point of it all? On my led tipped pencil?
    the stencils of society are the enemies of creativity
    the enemies of creativity are the leaders of society
    I am a stencil, spraypaint my message on the subway
    so I can be on the underground and infect the purity
    my insecurity is happy with its current situation
    e equals emcee squared is cubed for lost relativity
    we grow facial hair before we grow up properly
    stopping me from caring for those that forsook us
    stretch the dimesions of your headcase
    for it contains the musical instruments to play
    me off the wall if you think outside the boxcutters
    that freed you from the womb of your pride.

    Be Well.
    wordperfect?
    ..o0Pure0o..

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    Nice piece...maybe should be in poetry...but anyways...
    Nice imagery....good word choices....deep thought...
    A bit to abstract for my tatse but thatsa just me...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=123432
    short poem

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    thanks
    wordperfect?
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    your new rhyme structure is way cool.

    this piece is deep man. the choice of
    words used is excellent - contrasting
    the least obvious. many quotables but
    my fav` lines are:

    I am a stencil, spraypaint my message on the subway
    so I can be on the underground and infect the purity
    my insecurity is happy with its current situation
    e equals emcee squared is cubed for lost relativity
    nice read. maven got shit locked down
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    thanks Quel-See
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