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    Still in the grave Johnny 6-feet's Avatar
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    Talking some dating advice (keystyled)

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...88#post1223188

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/newt...=newthread&f=5

    this is all true.

    attention young listeners and readers alike/
    i've got an open mic letchure for breeders and dykes/
    its like, my experience got me some knowledge/
    about the dating game, so take a seat within my colledge/
    now i started around sixteen with a bitch queen/
    who kept her colours hidden with camoflague precision/
    however this witch seemed, it was a sick scene/
    coz i was about division of her legs and lickin'/
    well fuck that, moving swiftly on to a year later/
    i was hooked up with honey skinned blonde from jamica/
    putting sledgehammers to cherries, trying new positions/
    my eyes were popping out with every new admission/
    but the long distance between us put a strain right on/
    it served to defeat us in a few nights, gone/
    so i popped my collar, refused to come to squallor/
    and check my radar for new girls for my impala/
    now in uni, i was on some new imagery/
    some hair gel, some contacts, a newer, fitter me/
    at my epitamy, getting flocks like never before/
    i would never be bored of all this revelry, whores/
    losing track of one girl to the next and so on/
    laura's, lauren's, lucy's, a new text to flow on/
    i found myself in trouble only 2 days ago/
    the consequence of a man who chose to play these ho's/
    two were at the same club, spotted me at the same time/
    walked the same route over, damn right my game shines/
    it was like "who the fuck is this?" "what who the fuck are you?"/
    then a swift kick in the nuts, i was struck hard through/
    as i sank to my knees feeling pain of all degrees/
    i reflected on my steez with these p-y-t's/
    i thought about settling down with a girl who'd repsect mine/
    ahhh fuck it, i'll just wear a metal cup next time!/

    pzz.

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    funny - I always laugh when I see your sig too. Flow was nice, vocab was ok. Very nice for a keystyle and humor piece. Nothing else to really say - I liked. Hit my Lamentations if you get a chance.

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    Hence Forward

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    nice ass signiture

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    YoU oWe Me..WeLl pAy Up nOw/Or i,LL mAkE YoUr DeAtH OfFiCaL..CaUsE yOuR gUnz wAs A TecHiNicaL FoUl/
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    wow, 3 replies and 2 of them were bullshit. cheers for the feedback SMZ.

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    Remember when I posted that picture on RB?

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    two were at the same club, spotted me at the same time/
    walked the same route over, damn right my game shines/
    it was like "who the fuck is this?" "what who the fuck are you?"/
    then a swift kick in the nuts, i was struck hard through/
    ^^this was ill funny...

    ummm i liked it.. the flow was on tac and the storytelling aspect of this was strong... the complexity and vocab were a bit shy but that's ok wouldn't want to confuse the reader... ummm just try flipping the structure a bit more to get an interesting turn of phrase ... but you did that once or twice so...

    overall decent work...
    Hence Forward

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    hmmm i c wat u mean bout uppin the vocab haha this was illness fam u def got some skill probably one of the best ive seen on this board
    i liked the begining lines the best
    attention young listeners and readers alike/
    i've got an open mic letchure for breeders and dykes/

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    Decent but I didnt really like some parts of it all that much.

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