me kool rap

[rappersdie]

Hand of fate is moving and finger points to you
He knocks you to your feet and so what are you gonna do
Your tongue has frozen now you've got something to say
The piper at the gates of dawn is calling you his way

You watch the world exploding every single night
Dancing in the sun a new born in the light
Say goodbye to gravity and say goodbye to death
Hello to eternity and live for every breath

Your time will come
Your time will come

The ferryman wants his money you ain't going to give it back
He can push his own boat as you set up off the track
Nothing you can contemplate will ever be the same
Every second is a new spark, sets the universe aflame

You watch the world exploding every night
Dancing in the sun a new born in the light
Brothers and their fathers joining hands and make a chain
The shadow of the Wicker Man is rising up again

Your time will come
Your time will come
oo yea if u didnt figure this out its a rock song by iron maiden

[randa]

nice god nice lol thats all i can say

[vane]

not my style, but alright emotional piece, stay up...

[Slayer]

Its alrite actually, i liked it nice emotions, more like a poem than a rap but i liked it yea it was nice to read.

peace rappersdie

[Mistral]

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[c.b]

I suck man... so i ain't good enough to critique you but nice work...I like reading multis though...can you add more please

[Provoke]

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Do us all a favour & dont leave 2 links of replies u've left.

[rappersdie]

heres another dawgs

Ricky was a young boy
He had a heart of stone
Lived 9 to 5 and worked his
Fingers to the bone

Just barely out of school
Came from the edge of town
Fought like a switchblade
So no one could take him down

He had no money, ooh
No good at home
He walked the streets a soldier
And he fought the world alone
And now it's...

Chorus:
Eighteen and life you got it
Eighteen and life you know
Your crime is time and it's
Eighteen and life to go
Eighteen and life you got it
Eighteen and life you know
Your crime is time and it's
Eighteen and life to go

Tequila in his heartbeat
His veins burned gasoline
It kept his motor runnin'
But he never kept it clean

They say he loved adventure
Ricky's the wild on
He married trouble
Had a courtship with a gun

Bang, bang! Shoot 'em up
the party never ends
You can't think of dying
When the bottle's your best friend
And now it's...

Chorus

"Accidents will happen"
They all heard Ricky say
He fired his six-shot to the wind
That child blew a child away

[Maven.]

you ignored the rules.