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ShortY spits first!
ShortY
BlackGrenade
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ShortY spits first!
uppin and checkin
here we go im checking in to kick ur ass
will drop in biut 5 mins
Blackgrenade what the fuck man u just gotta change your name!
im sick a people like u acting black its just getting kinda lame
After you hear the rest of this u might want my picture in a frame
and wanna ask me questions bout how i got your mother so tame
What the hell dawg what u meen u want a fight?
you still get your mum to tuck u in and check u got your nite light
Come on u little bitch u still belive in saint nick
u always write him letters wishing 4 a strap on dick
give you-a-kick, killa-u-quick
just the thought of u is making me-a-sick
u think your rap is dope and think u can internally bruize me
just you wait till im 18 when i get my-self an U Z I
wat the fuk u say you hate people acting black
well hell i am black u got a problem wif dat
why dont u tell my black ass while you give it a kiss
but i bet your lips really smell like piss
why dont u stop by the hospital and say hello to my son
and your brother thats right i fuked your mother
she gave up fightin back real quick
but i think she wanted a big black dick
your name is your height and people get frights
cause your a bulimic midget wearing tights
i bet u spend alot of lonely nights
i ate your mummaz pussy with some rice
god damn bitch she was so nice
and only cost $200 for the night
you say your gonna get a UZI wen ya 18
well wen im 18 i'll get a BlackGrenade
and u blast you so bad you wont be saved by 1st aid!
Yea shot bro that not bad i mine aint bad either
UPPIN 4 VOTES!
yeah we got good shit but we need some votes please!!
I reakon we should do an open mic together?
wanna
Shorty: bad opening, nothing interesting, same old "fuck ur mum"/"ur a kid"/"get a dick" shit, bad ending, and its uzi, not U Z I![]()
BlackGrenade: below average opening, more "i fuck'd ur mum" stuff, senseless stuff, bad ending, "ate your mum's pussy with rice"??? ladies and gentlemen, I present to you Bizarre II![]()
Both of you need to get some more ideas, read some of the tutorials available. Honestly, in my oppinion, this battle doesnt even deserve to be voted on. Both of you were awful. Both of you can do better.
uppin the thread and we need votes please so if u can vote and u visit this thread please vote!
Dis was a week battle....
BlackGrenade ur verse was kinda week and ur punches neva realy hit....there was no flow or structure....no personals....please evaluate,...
Shorty ur verse was ok....needs work tho...ur punches were ok but some were week.....u had on flow and ur structure was pretty elementry..no personalss...ppl personals win battles ok SO use them......overall ShortY won purly coz his punches hit and he had some structure....keep it up both of u
v/shortY...
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-ILLunatic
Last edited by ILLunatic; February 29th, 2004 at 11:40 PM
uppin dis thread need some votes please! and no sheep votes you no just following other peoples votes! Peace
Lyrical MC obviously didnt read the battles at all... they both sucked but shorty sucked more.... most of the lines were just "blah blah i'll kill you", but at least BlackGrenade had one punch (the mother comment), one personal (playing shorties name) and self-glorified his own name one the last two lines... weren't very good but at least he actually had punches....
All shorty did was threaten him with guns and insult him for being black... and judging by his hyphens towards the end of the verse, i think he thought he was doing multies.... sorry, but they werent multies at all...
The only thing shorty did better was flow... some of BlackGrenades lines were stretched and didnt flow as well as they could have....
Overall, you should both fix up your styles, and start using some better punches and lyrics... try reading some books, especially the dictionary... broaden your mind and try writing about everything around you... hope my comments helped... peace
Vote = BlackGrenade
honestly i thought you both were equal..
But im'a give it to BLACKGRENADE..the lines bout you beein BLACK is Funny..
on game..
your ryme schmes were a lil different but i thought shorty hadda better one..
the vocab goes to shorty too, but the fact of Punches winning a battle..
grenade got it..it made me laugh..pretty bad.."your mom wants a Big Black dick"..
^^^^^^^LoLoLoLoLoLoLoLoLOlOlOol.....anyway..return an honest vote...PLEEEEEEEZ in my battles...
vote-Black
PLEASE DROPPA VOTE ON MY BATTLES. THEYRE GETTING MAD SLEPT ON.
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