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    Equal Reactions

    So that was the situation, incubation against the rotating hands
    the audience- round table span, linger in heed of dialogue
    designed to this common center of the souls, the vocation stand
    foreign eyes await inevitability, character- breathing fireballs
    Written off as a mythical creature, because life flipped a role
    started as an anxiety barrier, but this anomaly become normality
    It hummed formality, as the distress widened, I itched to fold
    and then at the very moment I scratched, it begun this allergy
    As irritating as it must have been, I had to go back for more
    it festered my soul, with no nostrum for this subdued posture
    It could win me an Oscar, best performance as I smacked the floor
    I never act to snore, it controls all in this unglued Opera
    So I'm here, with these strangers hanging onto every single word
    my life organized in their journals with scripted illustrations
    Depicted as patience depletes and it's etched in fickle terms
    how this could possibly get any worse & if instinct is a wasteness?
    I feel subtle in this atmosphere, here for some coping feedback
    or to focus in fact, can't help thinking it's a fictional anecdote
    Ran my lips too far, its not too late, oxymoronically evoking retract
    assuming how the masses will brand me- the analytical antidote
    Atleast 3 of these onlookers have strolled in my Reebok Classics
    so their outlook on my burden is surely a pre-empted conclusion
    Sharp points of view aren't considered intrusions, they're answers!
    even the solution to rewrite the enigma of my retentive confusion
    Hoping this ringed diatribe has me seeking for the karma in dreams
    I must admit I reckon we're in full flight on this mayday evening
    Everyone's giving me reasons to be a hero against our arch enemy
    But I don't know what to think, this being my first AA meeting

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    my main, and only problem with this....the rhyme scheme was hard to catch (im too used to simple ones)...umm yea...this was great

    the vocab was top notch, no over use and none seemed forced

    it festered my soul, with no nostrum for this subdued posture
    It could win me an Oscar, best performance as I smacked the floor
    I never act to snore, it controls all in this unglued Opera

    i didnt catch the posture/opera rhyme...probably a pronunciation difference between us

    sides that this was great

    if you would be so kind
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...89#post1163089

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    this guy is always top notch when he posts
    shit was very damn good..I cant find any errors.
    I enjoyed this a lot...
    Bribeone
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    i didnt catch the posture/opera rhyme...probably a pronunciation difference between us
    Indeed...Although everything doesn't have to rhyme yuuuuuknow?! LOL

    Thanks you two

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    holy lord ..

    your pretty dope, and no everything does not have
    to rhyme. this was an ill piece, you made something
    simple, something complex. the way you write is as
    always, mad original. keep doing your thing, and keep
    trying to be as cool as me. and also, answer my im's
    .

    love alex.

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    Thanks Mr. Sand

    I'm hardly ever on AIM...its not my fault..I'll try to be there next time

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    I really appreciated the alternating line rhyme scheme, just cause noone does that anymore. Your vocab and imagery are orgasmic, as usual, and you writer's voice is ridiculously strong. You speak to me man....well, type, anyways.
    good work =)
    wordperfect?
    ..o0Pure0o..

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    *Stamps* Legendary~

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    I really appreciated the alternating line rhyme scheme, just cause noone does that anymore.
    I was just trying to be different

    Thankies for the replies =)

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    goddamn dawg!!! U need to be wrecognized for this shit for reel! U and Penskillz knock all these motherfuckers out!! aint nothin to improve in this piece...simply magnificent! keep that ill shit comin dawg and holla at me homie 1

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    Thankie son

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