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    Comin For You

    hey, this is my new song called "Comin for you"
    hope you like.


    Yo, Knife check
    Testing one , two um…your dead (two girls drop to the floor)
    This is my killing song...
    Im comin for you... (hahahaha)
    Aight, lets get tonight over with


    My favourite colour is blue, like the morning sky
    And like the blood inside you, before I crush your eyes
    I cant stand people that piss me off
    Wrap them in a carpet then off the dock
    Im a serial killer waiting for you at your front door
    I killed victim number 4 and there gonna be more
    I thought all this would be just a phase
    But I keep making girls go issing for days
    All these girls are dropping by the dozen
    Im beating there fucking asses like a jealous husband
    We all know a husband will get physical
    But if there stupid they’ll get put away like mystical
    I told the doc that im ill and twisted
    I ask him if he seen the girl on the news but he said he missed it
    So I went back out and got another girl listed
    The girl wanted to die so she didn’t resist it

    Chorus

    Im comin for you, your about to die
    Im comin for you, so don’t try to hide
    Im comin for you, run as fast as you can
    Im comin for you, cos im a big bad man
    Im comin for you, burry you underground
    Im comin for you, and you’ll never be found
    Im comin for you, I wont leave a trace
    Im comin for you, it’ll be like your lost in space


    I think my killing will never come to an end
    But you never know it could start off a trend
    I really don’t give a fuck, I’ll smack up a slut
    And people will be looking for her body while im livin it up
    I’ll sneak into a packed out club or a discreet pub
    And look for some fucking girls I can drug
    Don’t expect your daughter to come home, she dead
    I buried her in your own garden under the flower bed
    I need to make new ways of killing
    Cos these day killers are gettin soft about how much blood there spillin
    I don’t know where the hatred comes from
    Guess its just all thoses bitches that nag on and on
    Thinking there always right and were always wrong
    Shut the fuck up slut, chill and choke on this bong
    If you ever wonder why I love to hate
    My bitch of a ex got off with my best mate

    Chorus

    Theres a massive killer down in south Wales
    That is slaughtering all of the females
    They’ll never fucking find me
    Got the UK saying “who could it be?"
    Its on the news that 10 girls are missing
    But none of these girls don’t seen to be listening
    Gonna need to takes body’s apart
    Take the body parts and turning them into art
    O look, got a slut in a dark alley, told her to strip quick
    Forced her mouth open and made her suck on my big dick
    Made a quick call to the police
    I killed another girl, but I saved u a piece
    Theres only one thing im gonna give you
    She’s one with nature and that’s your only clue
    So have your daughter on your Christmas gift list
    Cause after new years, she’s back on my hit list

    Chorus x2



    i got other stuff at my wesite, laterzzz
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    Last edited by MC FEET; February 5th, 2004 at 11:06 AM

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    aight
    your a evil bastard haha had to get that out
    flow was pretty good, make lines even, and it'll be even better.
    vocab was alright...imagery was pretty good.
    nice drop,
    keep elevation
    peace

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    u dont know wot ur talkin bout
    ul just end up gettin wiped out
    u all think ur such heroes
    but really u no ur just the zeros
    u wanna come play
    well u come find me night and day
    u mite always think u did it
    but u no ur rappins always gonna b shit

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    uppin

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    come on ppl, i need sum reviews
    i wanna know what u think,

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    Since you asked...this wasn't that good...your flow seemed a bit choppy..your vocab needs to elevate along with your wordplay..you structure wasn't all the good..but..you do show potenial..so..peace...~click my sig~~~I'm nice...^^

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    i did to the beat of cum on everybody by eminem,
    it a song i would say u gotta listen to the beat

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mc_Russie
    i did to the beat of cum on everybody by eminem,
    it a song i would say u gotta listen to the beat
    I caught that right when you started with "my favorite color is"

    Flow - was alright but needs some work most of your lines were kinda choppy - try finding different ways to say the same thing so your words hit with the rhythm better

    Vocab - suited your piece, I haven't seen anything else you've done but I think you might wan'na elevate this. If you type your stuff try using a thesaurus - then if you want to use a word look it up in the dictionary first to make sure you know exactly what it means. Like I said though this work was pretty brutal and primal so your vocab suited it.

    Concept - I don't know if you were trying for comedy or for something hardcore but I think it does better as a comic piece.

    Overall - 6/10

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    its suppost to be dark comedy, but i guess u gotta hear my voice along with the beat and how i say it etc..

    thanks for that neways, laterzz

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    Thanks for the response to my drop 'Shine' no offence took!

    Great piece, I can't relate to it but maybe thats a good thing? You live in south wales? I was born in Swansea, Anyways - flow - pretty tight, Mentality not quite right, I think you should make it a bit funnyer it would suite your style more, and you got plenty of style keep spittin'. Peace.

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