CBL: The Great Beyond

[Throwaway123]

I Had Trouble Deciding On How I Was Going To Write The Topic, So I Decided To Take It To The Streets To Ask Around To See What The People Thought About The Great Beyond..

People I Meet:
Frank, Age 60, Retired
Jake, Age 21, Unemployed
Cathy, Age 34, School Teacher
Father Mahoney, Age 50, Priest

First I Met Frank, And When I Asked Him About The Great Beyond This Is What He Had To Say..

When I Was Young, My Imagination Would Wander When I Gazed At The Stars..
I Imagined I Was An Astronaut, On My Way To A Stop Over At Mars..
Finally Seeing That Which I Worshipped From Afar, Leading A New Life’s Decision..
To Start A New Home On Either Jupiter Or Saturn Was My Ultimate Vision..
To Finally Break Free Of The Sky’s Division, Between Us And The Heaven’s..
And Enter The Solar System Leaving Me Higher Then Any Fallen Brethrens..
So, That’s What The Great Beyond Has Always Meant To Me..
But I Hope It’s Not To Long Until This Becomes A Reality..

I Thanked The Man, Then I Met Jake Who Was Freestyling On The Corner..

Yo, When I Think Of The Great Beyond, I Think Of Finally Getting Signed..
Meeting A Record Company, And Being Told To Sign On The Dotted Line..
To Finally Put Away All My Struggles, And Become An Ultimate Superstar..
Better Yet An Icon, A God To Which Kid’s Learn To Worship From Afar..
Sounds A Little Bizzare, But This Is What I Dreamt About Since I Was A Kid..
Listening To The Classics From Eric B And Rakim, Then Rhyming Off My Lid..
It Be The Best Thing I Ever Did, To Just Walk Home With A Nice Record Deal..
And Tell My Parents, “We Can Finally Leave This Shit Hole And Just Peel..”

Word, The Kid Deserved It, But I Had To Move On, And Then I Met Cathy..

I Wish.. In The Great Beyond There Will Actually Be Some Peace..
That In This Lifetime, I Will Finally See All The Gun Fire Cease..
Because..
With All This Blood Shed, It Seems We Would Rather Leave A Man Impaled..
Then Trying To Find A Reason Why This Conflict Actually Availed..
My Thoughts Are Drastic, Because I Cut Through All The Bullshit And Lies..
I Learn To Look Through Children Eyes, And I Finally See Their Silent Cries..
With Satan In Disguise, We Teach The Children That It’s Alright To Fight..
Aren’t I Right Mr Bush? Is This What Your Trying To Teach Children Is Right..
I Hope You Felt Really Excited, Finally Discovering Saddam In The Hidden Burrow..
But The Only Difference Between You And Him, Is He Comes From The 3rd World..

What Strong Words, I Thanked Her, And Thought I Was Done Until I Met Father Mahoney..

Now My Son, You Ask Me About The Great Beyond, As If It’s Not Known..
God Bestows His Gift’s On You And You Still Act As If He Is Unknown..
Love And Kindness Is All That He Has Shown, Didn’t You Read His Book..
If Not Maybe You Should Give It A Look, It Might Even Leave You Shook..
To Learn That All Good Catholics, Rise To The Almighty Place In The Sky..
It Also Teaches You How To Deny The Temptations Of Satan When You Die..
So Give The Book A Try, Then Come Back To Me And Ask This Again..
And You Will Learn That The Great Beyond Is Actually Heaven..

Thank You Father, Now With All These Opinions Here’s My Idea on The Great Beyond..

Now What Am I To Be When I Finally Become A Graduate Of University..
I’ll Be Only 21, With The Only Credential I Hold, Being This Fancy Degree..
Will I Be To Adapt To A Working Man’s World, Where The Hours Are 9 To 5..
I Wonder If I Will Strive, Or If I Will I Just Struggle To Survive..
That’s Only 3 Years From Now, I Can’t Even Imagine About Ten..
I Mean Will I Own A House, Or Even Have A Family By Then..
Will I Still Lift This Pen, Or Will Rapping Be A Thing Of The Past..
Or Will It Be A Shift In My Career That Will Be Able To Last..
Am I Moving To Fast, or Should I Slow To Wait And See..
Confused By The Past, What’s The Great Beyond Hold For Me?..

[Throwaway123]

i know its long but lets get some upping

[Mistral]

Long read....but it was really worth it i thought....i really enjoyed this, liked how you did each part of the people, very good.....the content in each part was really good i thought, liked how you captured it from a few peoples views and put them down then finished it off with your own....But overall nice piece, great read....keep at it.

[Edicius]

Yea this story telling was nice, a good immagery used here man, olso the diff storys attracked me, very nice .. but your rhymesheme looked a bit simplistic to me, & the vocab could be upped on a few places, .. yet the story telling remained very well, & you enjoyed me with it .. =)

[Throwaway123]

can i get some more feed i know its long, but come on people

[Xx_Meks_xX]

really worth the read......very deep........very well expressed.....consistant with the topic......loved the story.......imagry was great metas and wordplay and flow were all there.........would like to hear It!.......10/10........
hit up me n wise ways collab.........it's long but so was this!!

[Throwaway123]

lets get some more feed, plz

[Provoke]

The story telling was good..
Imaginative & creative, But it lacked a certain complexity.
Each part was good, a strong point..
These approaches are seen often, but usually not very well executed.
You're a exception.
A nice piece..though i suggest you dont use so many different colors.

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