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  1. December 9th, 2003, 04:33 PM #1
    Magnificent T
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    New Light

    Yo, I'm new to the game
    'Magnificent T' is my name
    I ain't no hater & Iain't no lover
    So I'ma keep doin' my thang,
    If u hatin' on me you hatin' a King.
    I'm neutral like water but can react like acid ,
    I'm fantastic, calm down pleaze before i
    become all drastic

    I spit Lyrics like i spit on the pave
    the only time u see me is
    when i contemplate in a cave.
    If I loose focus i'll be sleepin' in a grave,
    if u become a hater on me
    i'll be forced to make u my slave.
    When i'm flared up i spit out flames,
    right now i'm candle lit tryin' to bring
    New Light to the game.

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  2. December 9th, 2003, 04:38 PM #2
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    reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies or this gets deleted.
    thanks
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  3. December 9th, 2003, 05:04 PM #3
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    this was way too simple, kids play......lengthen ya bars to start with...that'll help next get a decent scheme going,...and get some multis thrown in....you dont need to go over board on complexity, but some is good..lol......pZ....elevate
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  4. December 9th, 2003, 05:07 PM #4
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    new but it was aight heard betta
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  5. December 9th, 2003, 05:28 PM #5
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    yo, Deva thanx for the advice!
    I'm the diamond in the dirt, that ain't been found
    I'm the underground king and I ain't been crowned


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  6. December 9th, 2003, 05:44 PM #6
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    Yo Maven is dis what u asked 4?

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...554#post974554

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...5&pagenumber=2

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...591#post974591
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  7. December 9th, 2003, 05:45 PM #7
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    yo wut up homie

    im new to so i really got nuttin to say but it was a basic flow, jus elevate sum more n youll b another hot mc

    return de favor
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...threadid=97593

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  8. December 19th, 2003, 02:56 PM #8
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    ...I didn't like it...I thought is was too short and your rhyme was too simple...but...hey what do I know...???...keep up^^
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  9. December 19th, 2003, 02:58 PM #9
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    Thanx Ron D uppin'
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    I'm the underground king and I ain't been crowned


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  10. December 19th, 2003, 03:01 PM #10
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    soz lastpoet if u didn't like it but as i said "i'm new 2 the game"
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    I'm the underground king and I ain't been crowned


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  11. December 19th, 2003, 05:31 PM #11
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    This was ok....but it was too simple...make your lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length so its structured good and so it helps your flow out....also try adding some multies and internals to this to make it better...also try to up your vocab...keep elevating and keep at it.
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