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Thread: Currupted Visions: Hurtful Memories..(A past i want but hate)

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    Currupted Visions: Hurtful Memories..(A past i want but hate)

    chorus*
    its a memory i miss but hate
    something i brought 2 this and hate 2 debate
    she broke me,but i miss her very essence
    all i want 4 x-mas is her very presence

    dont ever thing i forgot u,dont blame urself problems occured not-u
    i miss u, wish u was hear,near u made my ways,but not 2 hear u got make shakin in fear
    old shit in the past,this year movin 2 slow,not close 2 fast
    it hurts me 2 write bout u,cuz im scared wat 2 think of wat 2 do
    even though u broke-me,the way hands of death glad 2 choke-me
    its been over a year and i cant wait,wat will i do i cant speak at a speechless state
    wat if u chang'd better then ever,sever my heart, but u where hurt 2 wit pain 2 remember
    im ready 2 4get past years,how can i liv wit mself the way i pass'd ur tears
    i blame myself 4 lettin u go,i didnt try hard enough still dont know wat 2 do tho
    the years u have on me R a thing,u dont even know wat 2 my life u can bring
    i was happy and never thought 2 be-sad,but wat u did i dont know if we can have wat we-had
    im want things 2 be similar 2 then,here and thoze friends how fimiliar bad was 2 them
    i could barely sleep wit tears 2 drown me,if she still luvs her heart would have found-me
    shes gone true and i find myself losing,chosing things i wish i'd be refusing
    ill never do drugs and take her path,she tried 2 convince me..but i never calculated her math
    i kno she never ment no harm,but her leaving was not no false alarm
    crushed me internally and left me a mess,wish i could have died there lay'd 2 rest
    i miss her and 4get her at her best,but wen it came true she fail'd the test
    hard 2 take-in, wat she was makin of herself,was it hear or something fake-in
    might never know a question 2 ask,2 look her in the eyes..ill probably be the last

    chorus*
    a memory i can not throw-out
    many ppl see us..and the problem they know-about
    i want her back so we can live and 4get
    4 her ne thing ill give no rzon 2 live in regret


    if im the last ill be 2 afraid,if only i could have changed her she would have stayd
    she screamed and had a right 2 yell,sell my heart 2 her and she let it go and it fell
    broke it but i still forgive,she trully cared, but the drugs made her mind morbid
    im 2 yrs younger but still,ive noticed emptyness wit only she could fill
    look at me now 1st time i thought, now shes in my thoughts, a memory i have brought
    ive been a wreck evers since 2 years ago,she was somethin special 2 me u kno
    now i must wait 4 months 2 come, im still unsure of her uneazy welcome
    im terrified so much i cant move,wen she gets back thing wil be good got nothin 2 prove
    if only i knew wat she is goin through,its even hard in thought 2 be ther 4 u
    i have different views at this out look,like the problem 2 a weel wrote book
    2 get her back a joy it would create,id stay wit here 2 the night crew dark and it was late
    2 rejoice our past yr wit missing each of us,never more must ther be question 2 our trust
    if im the last 2 speak my care,never again will i leave here juss somewhere

    memories of her attack me strong
    only 2nd time ive mention'd her at song
    im scard 2 remember even our good times
    even tho i luv here my she caused my sad rythmes
    still want u back plz hurry back
    im sick of wonderin where ull be at,
    wen u should be wit me at home u kno that
    A.rtificial I.ntelligence

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    ZZZzzzzZZzzzZzZZzzzzzzzzZZzzzZZZZZzZZ!!!!

    Y'ALL SLEEPING LOL


    wake up

    and plz

    give me some feedback....
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    this is pretty blanded... no joke... I mean... it was cool... I think you could have done this a little better... seriously... plus this topic has been done to much... just replied to something just like it... ya flow seemed a little off... unless you spit fast as hell... but... 4 on a 10...
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    we see you Cock-A-Roaches looking...

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    ^^thanx man 4 the feed....

    i kno the topics ..overused..but its all true..juss had shit...2 get off the chest....

    thanx 4 the feed...

    and ill look into workin on the flow...

    peace
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    ehh this was aight flow was pretty good emotion was ok pretty deep not to much to say just elevate an multis metas throw some in there really let out your emotion man pour it out
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    k^^thanx man..

    much appreciated 4 the feed..

    keep it good
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    oopz...my 3 ppl i threw some feed at..was


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    this was alright i thought man....the flow was there, got off at a few spots but if you added a few more multies or internals it would make up for it...your structure was alright watch the line length on some of the lines though man....but overall this was pretty good...keep at it and keep dropping.

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