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[@rTu-d3e2]

ayo' The things we do for lust are redicolous//
knowin its obvious but tryin not to be conspicuous//
actin all non-shalont, in front of eye witnesses//
knowin wit out em' there; what our intention is//
so in front of people we talk in codes and half sentences//
tryin not to spoil the thought; of our innosence//
when we guilty as Clinton is, when they found the dress wit stains of his kids//
So why do we do it? why would we go thru it//
its so stupid, if we like it blame it on cupid//
whats wrong wit sex? it feels nise//
why shouldnt I penatrate the vagina if it fits right//
More over who doesnt like sex//
lets ridicule THEM for startin this mess//
I'm real I aint into frontin//
I'll be honest if I wasnt penatratin a chick I'd be phukin a blow up doll or sumpthin//
why would you hide, behind close doors I happen to like it in public//




just some shyt talkin about how people(usually females) like to act like they aint freaky nasty when we all know how freaky nasty they really are!!!!LOL Gimme some feed back please

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

It was short, simple and to the point. And It wasn't that great. You need to work on structure, flow, vocab,...Ok to make a long story short, you need to work on everything.

[McGhost]

not bad dawg i felt like abit of snake wid all da sssss at the end but in ma mind it was readable and thats what matters i think you just need time to improve